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Not As I Remembered

 Not As I Remembered  I went back to where I've beenbut nothing was like it was back thenthe old oak tree, was still there the ground under it still bareinitials of my first love, still shownthe tree had tried to heal, the cut as it had grownbut I had cut it deepforever there for it to keep the old house was still therebeen vandalized and striped baresign on the door, condemned by the cityfunny how I remembered it so prettythen I realize, it isn't much worst, than it was back thenit's not what I remembered it had beentime had faded those memories that are sadand enhanced the good times I hadnow when I think about that shack, in a far away cityI remember my old friends and a house so pretty                             copyright 5-17-00 hippiepoet69                                 
— hippiepoet69, Jan 07, 2010

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Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 5 months ago

Not as I remembered

hippie poet This is like a photograph we remember the moment feel all the senses special times but keep this always. Electric Blue
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hippiepoet69

16 years 4 months ago

Your making my day

this house is fiction but it could be any one of the houses we lived in one school year where I went to 8 different schools. My dad was never happy and always moving around. I've seen the USA in a Chevolet.
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ngaioBeck

16 years 4 months ago

Remembered

Nicely done. I can relate to this experience and feelings as I went home.
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hippiepoet69

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks

Most of my poems come from deep emotions. I don't write much but I put my heart in it when I do. Unless I'm just having fun twisting a few words. Thanks foe reading my work. Take Care. huey
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scribbler

16 years ago

as i remember

Since you don't use "stars"I'll try not to use them on your work.I liked it a lot.Just goes to show not all lost dreams occur out in the boonies.Later,Stan
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thanks Stan

I spent most of my childhood in cities. But still a lot was a few miles past the boonies. Those shacks where lucky to have an outhouse out back. I tried to blow out the first electric light I seen. Oh! the good old days. Thanks for reading. Take Care. huey
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magics02

16 years ago

Huey

Wow this one is really good here and I love the descriptive feel of it. Nothing like old memories we all have. Keep it up, your doing a good job here lately with your writing Love,Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thanks Mona

This is one of my old ones. Most of my poems don't requere descriptive writting. So I don't use it near enough. One of the best descriptive was "Chasing Rainbows" I lost it years ago. I've tried to rewrite it. But can't get the feel again. I wish I was better at using descriptive writting. I've been working on tighening up my poems I write now. Thanks for read. Take Care. huey