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A Double-sided Thorn in the Side

Empty corridors leading to
rooms that hold the sounds
as to the heighth and breadth of a life;

blasphemy and unconditional love
has exited simultaneously
from, said mouth.

Avenues plowing through to
dens, that shelter the sights
as to the width and depth of a life;

honesty and deceptional activities
have existed at the same time,
from said brain.

it sounds insane
but, the fact still remains,
truer words, were never spoken;

sidewalks leaning on towards
the gardens of my iniquities,
and the library of my thoughts...

where I revisit all of the feelings
that have trespassed two at a time
across the valley of my heart.
— docmaverick, Jan 06, 2010

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Antoinette....

...for the comment. The real sadness would be if there was no understanding on the other end, of this. Thanks again, for reading. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 4 months ago

Uh oh.

Not no understanding, quite a lot. I like the piece but I feel the extended metaphor is a bit muddled. Or I am. Am also having trouble with your usage of "as to" here, "offer suggestions as to the usages". But it's late and I'm tired. Will get back to this. Some typos before I go- as to the heighth and breadth of a life; [height] has exited simultaneously [have] from, said mouth. [lose the comma if it means the mouth you are referring to and not the mouth said it] Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

jess....

...I'm a bit fuzzy on what you are talking about. Please advise. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.