hugo la rosa

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Our Children's Trials

Most of our well intentioned

detractors

smile sideways

when we err by loving

our children.

And because we hit

no perfect scores at the

ideal target

--every single time--,

they gratify themselves

in the indignities

of their merciless appraisals.

Losing the game by

never trying,

they have guided

their own

without the insights

we have grown

tenderly

like a flower garden.

On the contrary,

they have flung our

human errors

like weapons of war,

and love the pretense to

weave

their lack of love

around the simple truths of life.

So they start

the unsuspected

wheel

and the cruelty they

harbor

on themselves.

They have anchored

their warring ships

for many a life of pain

and woe.

They hardly know

about the love that waits

and grows

for them

amidst their tares

and thistles.

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Comments

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Strong

Around in circles. You have strongly written this with thought yet the question always remains, Why. Who could answer this and any other concerning topics. I feel this rant is a feeling we can all relate to but one day, things do come back and bite you on the arse. True. What goes around comes around, just like the wheel. Great write Hugo. Thanks, Love Lyz. XX Welcome back bud.

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Lyz:

Good to see your favorite picture. Thank you for the welcoming. Yes, you are right, this poem is a rant I can probably relate in a private way. It's obvious I was a little offuscated when I wrote it. Now, my good friend, what do you suggest: Should I delete it, and start all over? Sincerely, Hugo

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

No

You have delicately used words that make it stand out and we all need that one or two raves occasionally, it gets the blood flowing in the right direction again. I am so glad you have graced these pages again. I have been trying to catch up with all works as I was absent for a wee time as well, but not like some of you, a long time. Seemed that way any how. I love the poem you wrote for your daughter about Batman. What a creator you are. Back to this, well, the point gets across, even if the reader does not know the reason behind the words but it is up to you to decide. A well educated man like yourself can always turn a sour moment into a slight taste of bitter. You have written this well and it has come from first thoughts so I like it this way dear man. I do hope all is well now though. I find first draughts true of thought and emotions so I say leave it and watch the response. Tell me to shut up, will ya, lol. I am raving on and am getting a little off track. I am just so excited to see you back. Now we will leave it at that. lol. Love Lyz. XX

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Lyz:

I have followed your advice and added a reason for the ranting. I have re-phrased some of the images, and softened a few sharp edges. Thank you. Sincerely, Hugo

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

I thought it read differently

Still it is a great write, rant or not. I always get my concerns etc out by writing. See, you mellowed enough to edit. But my dear man, we all have to let it out then if nothing changes, we have to let it go. I hope all is well at the homestead now. You keep your pen to paper, believe you have done all you can. We will chat soon, and the changes are just as good. Love and take care, Lyz. XX

Candlewitch

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Hugo

I have been gone for a short while too. It is good to see you writing. This poem is edgy with the complicated subject matter. Rant or not, I like it and the questions it raises. Always, Cat

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Cat:

Thank you for the comforting words. How are you Cat, I hope everything goes well with you and yours. I know you had a short vacation from the site too. As you can see, once you stop writing you become a little rusty. I hope to improve in a few weeks. Sincerely, Hugo