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docmaverick
docmaverick
Jan 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Sagrada

Dawn
blistering through a sunrise,

an infant's hand
wrapped around my finger,

knowing and agreeing
on shared truths, or a passionate cause;

these things generate awe
and cherishable natures.

Treasure
all things...magic,

to better understand our own mortality,
and appreciate the singularity of you.
— docmaverick, Jan 03, 2010

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Lunegirl

16 years 5 months ago

Dawn blistering through a

Dawn blistering through a sunrise This is a real grabber for me ; ) Its all great but the last stanza is apeals to me as well, constructive feedback, maybe lose the ''a'' from the second line of the first stanza. I think this makes the impact more powerful, although i do like using ''a'' in my lines to. thanks for sharing vicki
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Thank-you, Vicki....

...for the feedback. I took out ALL of the "a's" in the poem...(even though I've ALWAYS been known as an "a" man)..and I think you were right. It seems to read easier,now. Don't you think? Anyway, thanks again. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

You see, Madame....

...I just didn't wanna come across as some kinda, "hoe" for "a's". There are plenty of "a"-hoes out there, and I wanted not.....to be considered as one. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

LOVELY WORK

HOW DO U LIKE MY POEM SUNDAY What a way to start a Sunday With any man one day You cook while I prepare myself For you to share And when we are done Twill be lots of fun You upon me I beneath Where will we be next Sunday? Can you say? Let’s begin our life Preparing for the next Sunday
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Wow! Great and truthful words!

I really enjoyed reading this poem! It filled me with a sense of life's sweetness and made me joyful! Excellent work!
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Lonnie....

...I probably could've added, "Acceptance of one's work", to the list...too, eh? Seriously, thanks for the comment. It made me feel, joy. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

LOVELY POEM

AND HOW DO U LIKE MY POEM SUNDAY What a way to start a Sunday With any man one day You cook while I prepare myself For you to share And when we are done Twill be lots of fun You upon me I beneath Where will we be next Sunday? Can you say? Let’s begin our life Preparing for the next Sunday
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Doc

How true it is ... wonderful write your just getting better and better Imo ... love and hugs Jayne x x
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

LOVELY SUNDAY

HOW DO U LIKE MY NEW POEM What a way to start a Sunday With any man one day You cook while I prepare myself For you to share And when we are done Twill be lots of fun You upon me I beneath Where will we be next Sunday? Can you say? Let’s begin our life Preparing for the next Sunday
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Very "astute", Anna~

..."two" is VERY "nice". But, no more than "four", please. AHh...hA ! You're a "gem". "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Beautiful words

Melted my heart, what more can I say. You are stepping up. Love Lyz. XXX
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

YOUVE READ ME BEFORE

HOWZ THIS ONE SUNDAY What a way to start a Sunday With any man one day You cook while I prepare myself For you to share And when we are done Twill be lots of fun You upon me I beneath Where will we be next Sunday? Can you say? Let’s begin our life Preparing for the next Sunday
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 4 months ago

Oh, mate.

You know I love your freeform more than your rhyming works. You also know I have a bee in my bonnet, a whole bloody hive, about didactic or inspirational poetry. Once I see second person objective in a poem I get ready to blow my stack and say things like "leave that crap to Hallmark, that's their job, not a poets" Now, having had my obligatory rant, some possibly useful crit and a different way to end it. First two verses, great. knowing and agreeing on shared truths, or[and?] charitable causes; [charitable sounds a bit pious, how about passionate?] these things generate awe and cherishable natures. [fine] [I] Treasure all things…”magic”, [lose the quotation marks. They look messy and magic is real] to better understand [my] own mortality and appreciate the singularity of you. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Sagrada means....

...Sacred in Aramaic. Thanx for the feedback ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

YOU HAVE READ MINE BEFORE

HOWZ THIS ONE DO PL SAY SUNDAY What a way to start a Sunday With any man one day You cook while I prepare myself For you to share And when we are done Twill be lots of fun You upon me I beneath Where will we be next Sunday? Can you say? Let’s begin our life Preparing for the next Sunday