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docmaverick
docmaverick
Jan 02, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Gulls, in a Sum of Lump

I've heard of speaking volumes
but let's talk in decibels,
what can ruin any sunset
is the presence of, The Gulls.

Negativity aside
they don't just spoil the view,
you also have to figure in...
they're scavengers, too.

So jaded, is my thinking
I'll probably fail the "test",
but they're always mucking up the view
when I look towards the west.

The monotone concussion
of the waves, that hit the shore,
lend ambiance to a setting
that makes one long, for more !

If I could wish them all away
I'd be in every body's debt,
I just can't quite get over
how they ruin each sunset !

We need to combine all our strengths
and get all gulls in a "sum of lump"...
and banish their existence
to the local, city dump !
— docmaverick, Jan 02, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

Hey Doc, did you ever read

Hey Doc, did you ever read "The Conference of the Birds by Farid Ud-Din Attar? If not get thee a copy. Enough poetic *bird* fodder for a lifetime of poetry. http://www.innersense.com.au/salonim/articles/sufi.html [Ali Alizadeh of Melbourne, hmmm.. {just one site... google should you be interested.}] Love, Anna
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Oh yes

We have the same problem here and you have written this marvelously with a great title to boot. Those damn gulls congregate near all restaurants, beaches, Mcdonalds and are by no means afraid of traffic or us. And the mess they leave, just like pigeons. Beautiful birds in their own right but getting to be a pest. I am seeing a little more of you, how wonderful, lol. Great poem. Love Lyz.
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

You're right, Lyz....

...plus that incessant "screetching"....sheesh! However, I meant it more like, "seagulls can turn a glorious sunset into a pedestrian matter.....absolving it of any beauty". In other words, they're blatently distractive. You, on the other hand...have been quite the opposite, of late. You've been helping me, rather regularly, I might add...in seeing some of the beauty in my own poems, and I sincerely must thank you. It's been that time of the "life" for me, lately. (L.o.l.!) "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Dear man

Let me have my vision, lol. We write in cryptic at times but I am just a little slow in comprehending such writes, so be patient with me, I will learn, lol. I still enjoyed your comic approach in this and I do see a lot of the old Doc, not in age, forgive me, lol, but I see you getting back to your (old) self. Once again, you put a smile on my face. Love Lyz. XX
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Lunegirl

16 years 5 months ago

Gulls???

The question is though, are Gulls a metophor for something else? A witty and light hearted well written read, with deeper undertones (maybe just for me ; ) ) vicki
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Yes, Vicki....

...they're a metaphor all right. Imagine a "life", and being surrounded by "idiots". (A sunset, and seagulls.) It actually made better sense in the planning stages. Thank-you for your comments, though. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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Lunegirl

16 years 5 months ago

Im quite thick sometimes, i

Im quite thick sometimes, i bet alot of people got what you meant. Im just nervous of translating poetry in metophor as im not experienced at all, just had a feeling. I still think its great ; )
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emily messner

16 years 5 months ago

very nice except

i see u dont like segalls at all they might ruin the sunset but you should look at the beauty of them...there entertaining to watch....but written very nice:)
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Emily....

...for the comment. True, they can be entertaining...but, if you'll read the above comment and reply.....you'll see what I meant. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
EM

emily messner

16 years 5 months ago

your welcome

Sorry i took it the wrong way i just read into things alot more then what i should but i understand now.:)
EM

emily messner

16 years 5 months ago

:)

no problem your such an amazing poet
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

OK so anyone that feeds the

OK so anyone that feeds the birds I am guessing will get chased off lol ... I feed the seagulls cant help it I am a suck for any animal that begs brilliant write Doc ... you've been writing wonderfully and I'm loving it love and hugs Jayne x x x
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Thank-you, Jayne....

...Like I said above, it was just a metaphor as to how a few people can mess up a given situation. That's all. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

but the gulls make it all so beautiful ...

Oh no my friend, the gulls make it all so beautiful ... their cries so mingle with the sound of the sea and the surf and can only enhance a beautiful sunset. And truly, where would we be without all of the cackle to bring meaning to the peace of silence and bring to us, our awareness of its beauty. We need the good and the bad and --- the ugly. BUT aside from my personal preference of loving the "gulls" ... I have to chuckle -- your poem is so well done. I simply lilted through this delightful metaphor like a knife through butter. Smooth, wonderful, delightful, and delicious rhyme. (I am partial to good rhyme) Loved the purposely used cliche and excellent placement of them for effect. "lump sum", "speaking volumes" Excellent work with this one. A thoroughly enjoyable verse to read aloud and think on. Thank you. ~Pamela
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 4 months ago

I took the metaphore to be

that we can often let the ugly blind us to the beauty, or not see the beauty in the ugly (gulls look nice, from a distance, they just sound nasty and have nasty habits). Then again, I have always proposed shooting Jonathon Livingston. Well written, sir. I question the use of "monotone", monotones don't lend ambience. Some of the rhymes place an un-natural stress on the word, like sunset, but you know that. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

OH!

Shoot Jonathon Livingston? Why that, well that would be just awful. *smile*