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Rose

Imagine a rose
a beautiful rose.
One you raised yourself.

A scarlet red rose
with just a dot of pink
Now imagine that scarlet red rose
with just a dot of pink
the one you raised yourself
slowly and carefully wither away.

Now that scarlet red rose
with just a dot of pink
is a light brown.
All slumped over and dieing.

And no matter how hard you try to save it
it dies.
So what did you do?
Did you cry or wen?
No you went to the store and bought another one.

But in the end you find out that
that rose was special and
can't be replaced in any
way, shape, or form.

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Silent_Rain

16 years 4 months ago

Good poem Skye...

I think that you could work on it a little, you repeat yourself alot, and in so poems that can be good, but in this the repatinsion of "scarlet red rose with just a dot of pink" is not as good as it could be... Try word to replace others and what not... Love Ya!!! ~Rain~
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BrightEyed

16 years 4 months ago

beautiful

could use a lil work but i love the concept. its awesome
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

A rose

The rose, the beauty of a rose. Yes it too shall die and still be beautiful. I liked this one, just fix your spelling, (dying and wen, what was the word wen supposed to be) sweet sky magics02
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ifoundaplace

16 years 4 months ago

Skye

I like it. :) Dani