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Restraint(edit)

It was like
scraping butter
with the head of a pin,
stretching out of shape
as I tore, and tattered
at your restraints
I felt,
helpless to stop
your tragedy unfold

you think I actually
give a damn?

everything,
all of it
was your design of time
now,
wasted in the filth
of an obsession

plunging in with
both eyes glazed
you became a wild beast
digging at the earth
pawing listlessly
at the moon,
mindless to minutes
us,
turning the page forward
and you stuck in the prologue

deluded naked of humanity
and lost in a syringe

you think I give a damn
and I do ...

but what the fuck else can I do?
I gave you a map the compass
yet you still follow
a poisoned trickle,
and I will ever regret
you wasting life
dicarding it like lolly wrappers

I could slap you so hard
but I wont ...

just yet
 

— Seren, Jan 01, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Orphani

16 years 5 months ago

I don’t think I ever read

I don't think I ever read a poem that could make you laugh out loud ( I was a scrape of butter) Is there a better line in all poetry? show me. From there the poem descends into the frightening depths of the world ; to a slap in the face, and from you Jayne thats gotta sting.I know I lost a tooth on this poem.They keep getting better.great art.B
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

thanks so much for your

thanks so much for your comment its much appreciated (hugz) I will be round reading later on catching up with a few writes I am sure you have something new for us me to read ???? I hope so anyway take care much love Jayne x x
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magics02

16 years 5 months ago

Your the butter on my toast

A HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU MY SERENE This is profoung young aussie friend..I have to say a buttery toast to you this morning as I have come to love your words, and cherish your friendship many miles away. Thinking of you and wishing you health and prosperity in the new year ahead. Much love from Florida gal Mona xoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Miss Mona

I wish you nothing but the best in the new yr dear lady I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem this was one i wasnt sure of at all ... so your words ring in my ears we have hands of friendship that cross oceans ... always much love and hugs Jayne x x x
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Well, Seren....

...I found myself giving a damn, too.....but, what else could I do? Seriously Seren, get your tongue out of your cheek !(lol !) I think I would call this effort, an "odditude".....and I really liked it, and it's "impish" sort of style. Another fine posting, for you ! Thanks, "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Doc

what a beautiful cat ... I ahve six cats now lol will have to put the new kittens' pic up in the next few days ... an odditude ? LOL woot thats good cause odd means different and I am that hahaha happy new year dear Doc love and hugs Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

The One

Do you have a name ... ? cause I am not sure what to call you lol .... I am sorry that you relate to that line I wish that noone ev en felt it unfortunately there are millions that do have a prosperous new year love Jayne x x x
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 5 months ago

Yeah

Its Alex......And prosperity to you as well.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

And lovely it is to have a

And lovely it is to have a name, nice to meet you Alex :) I have a nephew with that name so I expect I wont forget ;) kind regards love Jayne x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

Seren’s trying to

Seren's trying to butter-up all of us. Me thinks, she's succeeding. The brat! luv, mum p.s. toasting... tasting... toasted to perfection! aDon’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

LOL

""""BIG SMILE"""" that was kismit ... the last person to call me a Brat was my other Mum ... and that was many years ago ... just made my day hahaha love you Mum glad to have you back you are ever missed Jayne x x x
yenti

yenti

16 years 5 months ago

Today

Fancy starting out as a scantily dressed piece of bread to end up giving someone a slap, well done but I hope that the slap is still there to give, it is a thing of what to do in this way of things do you slap the crap out of someone or do you ponder to their mood swings. Little lady you haven't the energy to waste on others as yet, but God help them when you have Lol. You take great care of you as you are precious to us all, Yours with great thoughts, Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Ian

God help him now LOL I walk softly and carry a big stick hahaha ... but your right and you are too kind dear man and thank you love and hugss Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

I Imagine that it would be a

I Imagine that it would be a long labourous task and what I was trying to portray and that you got it made my day ... soemtimes its out of our control ... but I am a firm believer in prevention ... so stepping in isnt a if but a when thanks so much for your wonderful comment it is much appreciated love Jayne x x
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chrisbyrne

16 years 5 months ago

great write

There is a skill to keeping this subject out of the morose. You did it. You kept all the frustrations and let-downs in there. You are good lady! Chris
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Chris

Thanks for the visit and the comment its much appreciated lol dunno about good but im alright hahaha I put tape over my horns so noone can see them LOL love Jayne x x
C

CyberSpace

16 years 5 months ago

right now I dont know

right now I dont know whether to laugh or cry seriously this just blew me away love you hubby xoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Now you know why I didnt

Now you know why I didnt want you to read it ... I knew it would shock you love you bubba wifey x x x x x and its alright I got my pimp hand ready ;)
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

You slap, and do it now

Well written piece and yes with a wow factor. I am impressed with this one Jayne. Next level reached I think. Well Done. A+ and a bonus 5. Bravo. Love Lyz. Tell Snake, dont cry, applaud, lol. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

I will BOW and say thank you

I will BOW and say thank you ... next level reached? time to step up again me thinks lol love and biggest hugs jayne x x x