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The Executioner's Song

Cruel are the words
that refuse to rhyme
in the subprime
darkness of the soul.

Blue was the inverted sea
before Descarte's
cryptic deadline
crashed like a guillotine
on the rocks.

Calm were  the
surrendered waves
before terrified in the silence
of unscheduled blackouts
you sang your mournful song.
— Heading South, Dec 31, 2009

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Heading South

Heading South

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jess

Definitely, without a shadow of a doubt, heroically esoteric ^_^ Cheers, Daniel
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Daniel

I am speachless ... I sing that mournful song and it poirets my heart another brilliant write my friend I loved it ... you last stanza is my favourite love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne

Thanks. As Jess says this is very esoteric. Sometimes writing directly doesn't work and you have to shine the lamp off at an angle - see what kind of visions arise in the ambient light. Thanks for the read and the comment! All the best, Daniel