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seabhac
seabhac
Dec 31, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Eve

I am the Eve
Beneath the tree
Your fruits forbidden to me
But having touched and tasted you
Sinuous and sweet
I am tainted.
I plea
Tie my hands behind me
Lash my limbs to
Driven stake
Mask my mouth
Cork my ears
Blind my eyes with dust
Leave me for the vultures
To pick my bones,
Take away my lust.
Gorge on my desire
Know me my Love,
Know
— seabhac, Dec 31, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Seabhac

I am slightly pissed ... soooo I will make a proper comment tomorrow lol love and hugs Jayne x x x x btw its brilliant lol :)
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Lovely Jayne

So much for you to celebrate... Thanks Hugs Seabhac
B

bjp

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Elizabeth,

This poem is a very nice variation on a classic theme. It calles to the ripeness of passion and teases with notions of bondage which are both in juxtaposition and parallel to the licenciousness of the original story. Similarly, the masking and corking is in juxtaposition to the knowledge gaining which is part of the epicentre of the story, and in making such a dramatic juxtaposition, accents the original issue. The ending is, one imagines, very much like Eve's own aspirations at the tree of knowledge, that she be known so that the act and feeling of love is connected more subjectively to her as a person than to mere prehistoric sex drives. And the use of know plays on the King Jame’s version of “slept with” which is “know”. And it has the nice audable conflict with “no,” which may be reflective of uncertainty, worry of guilt or an admonition to God. Well done, Elizabeth. Brian
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you Brian

Your help with this one really made the difference. Realisation is knowing something is wrong ...skill is knowing how to change wrong to right ( or write) and a supportive teacher is one who gives and guides quietly and subtly. Thank you Brian Five stars to you Seabhac
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Orphani

16 years 5 months ago

To clear up an old issue

To clear up an old issue that gets kinkier every time I hear it. The original sin was the partaking of the fruit, of the tree of knowledge.This is symbolic of Eve deciding for her self good and evil; after being instucted not to take upon themselves the perogative of deciding right from wrong.This is the equivalent of having a child, and telling them not to cross the street into traffic. and having them say I'll decide for myself..Adam and Eve were husband and wife, and so there was no restriction on them having sex.After becoming ashamed with this "false' knowledge they hid.This story in the bible is about taking the perogative to decide good and evil; sex is never even mentioned ;only the shame of nakedness.which God did not impart to them.Just thought I would clarify the issue as there seemed to be a misconception of the original text.. Barry ,,,o,,
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Ah yes , clarity...good

As stories and poems are conceived by a singular thought ( even in the case of the bible) the original thought and what the reader conceived it to be is often very diferent.We know that as poets , we are ever surprised at the slant or angle the reader takes on what we thought was a straightforward message. It is the way of it to take it and make the message our own, find value in it to relate to our own lives. Actually this poem has little to do with sex either and the 'forbidden' can mean many things. Of course a reply like this is playing devils advocate for the sheer hell of it... I do so love this website Thanks Barry Seabhac
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Orphani

16 years 5 months ago

You touch on a fasinating

You touch on a fasinating topic; that of interpretations.We all view things from the sum total of our experiences that we have interpreted right or wrong. A false premis leads to a false conclusion. Analisis , creativity, and discipline are an awesome combination.A passionatly supurb work of art. Barry ,,,o,,
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

What love is this that knows

What love is this that knows nothing but Desire? Brava, dear Elizabeth. ~A Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

I did promise I would come

I did promise I would come back sober ... lol ... and your poem on reading the other night was sobering in its brilliance ... brilliantly done and Anna says it beautifully above love and hugs Jayne x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Glad to see you safe and sound again

Thank you for comming back, what a memory...This my dear will be your year I am sure of it. Your words touch me in both your poetry and your replies. Much love to you there Seabhac
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ziggy

16 years 5 months ago

well well

this is truly a gem one of your best great choice words well expressed makes good read well done indeed ,,,,,,ziggy
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Happy New Year Ziggy

Lovely to have you come visit bearing stars and the gift of fine words ( different from the customary bottle here but I have to say I like it better) A new year for us all with fresh months of poetic juices flowing...lovely Seabhac
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Seabhac:

A very passionate poem, just like the heart who wrote it. The words keep pulsating, even after a while you have left the page. Nice work, it's full of life. Sincerely, Hugo
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Liz

Oh yeah. This was an exciting read. This is an amazing poem. You are a strong writer and I see it comes through with all your writes. I did enjoy the content and your vividness in this poem. Keep em comin. Love Lyz. XX
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bjp

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Elizabeth,

Congratulations on the spotlight! Brian
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

You are so supportive

To write and read and comment ...what are you on ? I want some ....o.k. maybe not but the @snake @ juice must help...big laughs to you Seabhac
SR

Stuart Reiss

16 years 5 months ago

I loved the poem and …..I

I loved the poem and .....I somehow loved it even more after I read Barrys comments.. Congrats on the spotlight best regards Stu P.S...Its kind of cool that your poem is entitled Eve and one of mine was entitled Adam... now the poems can be together in harmony on Neo lol
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Lonnie

What a lovely thing to say, thanks. I am supprised so much when people appreciate my work...the encouragement has certainly made me work harder to get things right even if it takes a few trys. Best Wishes From a snowed in Seabhac
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Lunegirl

16 years 5 months ago

I read the poem twice, I see

I read the poem twice, I see that you are telling the story of eve becoming aware of desire. The thoughts on bondage justs adds depth and richness to the peice, great read ; ) vicki
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Ah Vicki

I like that name so much better than your pen name , you must have proved to yourself with your last wonderful write that you are a woman of great intelligence and sensitivity...you did to me ... We are all bound in our own way to these bodies we carry for our life time...bondage can be many things...being bound as mother to her childern or bound to earth as searching soul and of course in play. Thanks for comming by and commenting Seabhac