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flowing reed
Dec 31, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Shower

Behold the beauty of the Sukura,
Transcience though may be a few hours
Is life most engaging shower.

Shower, shower, how refreshing to sit under these flowers
Sipping the magical power of
Bonding by these flowers.
Buzzes by whispering and soft laughter
In a park filled with Japanese and tourists like us.

Copyright by Soh Siew Huay
— flowing reed, Dec 31, 2009

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Orphani

16 years 5 months ago

Beautiful, delicate,

Beautiful, delicate, filigree of a poem. Gracefully light transilusence; as thru a butterflies wing, assending to the blue; from a flower. May I offer a hand to fluff the flowers. " ; transcience, though being a few hours " is cleaner and improves flow, and clarity shower, showers ? parks? various punctuations. A small dessert leaving a small licked plate. Barry ,,,o,,
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flowing reed

16 years 5 months ago

poetry inspires poetry

Much delighted to read such beautiful comments. Your poetic response is amazing but I wonder whether your spelling is intentional.I have not seen such a word as "transelusence" and the phrase " through a butterflies wing" is ungrammatical. Happy New Year! Opme.
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flowing reed

16 years 5 months ago

The beauty and the softness of the flower - sakura

No, it is written in English by me, a chinese lady. I am very happy that you are able to see the serene beauty of the sakuras as it is being conveyed in the poem. I have also written another poem on cherry blossoms in the title Sakura. Thanks Kaligantsaros for your comments. I feel highly elevated. opme.