When pigs fly

Like it, nice, made me smile. The rhythm is a bit out, but it still worked fairly for me. I daresay I'd tighten it by making the correct amount of sylables ( near as dash it) throughout the rhyme lines. Then it'd flow better. Scansion, is the fancy word for what I'm trying to say...at least, I think it is. I like your subject, I for one now have to go with my memory, I can still remember having dreams. ( and not the sort we all have in sleepytime. ) Ta for the smile, Kob. P.S. For instance, in verse 2 try altering I'll for I, and sky for skies. Verse 3, be pretending / have no ending. ect. ect.

You are indeed! Love your positive sentiments and I agree with you entirely! "I will never let go /Of the things that excite me/No matter how small/Or insignificant they might be." and then to go and cap it at the end with "That will be the same day I see pigs fly" is just a double WHAMMY of brilliant reiteration!! OUTSTANDING!! Forget the nuts and bolts referred to above - the poem is a beaut! Keep up the good work! Bonita j

Oh i'll have what you're having! i'll read this every time I'm sharpening my machete...;) peace amethyst

wow, this is a very good poem and Im glad that I read it!! Im not to good at saying what I may find wrong with a poem, but I can tell you this, I fined nothing in this poem that I would cange! You have a very good outlook on live, and I love the way you show that you show that though your poetry!! From one poet to the next, ~Rain~

As irrepressible as myself, a giving poem. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

I really dig this poem.I look forward to reading the rest of your stuff.Also thanks for your awesome review on "KEEPING YOUTH" it was much appreciated..

I have to say this is one of the best I read today bright. You are really coming to be a wonderful poet. I love all this entails and I felt it moved me in a way as if I wrote it long side of you. Bravo my friend. Great job here. Love, mona xxoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.