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Man said it would last a thousand years
Not nearly enough to pay for the tears
From the Abyss of time I crawled my way up
Don't tell me now your kinda awe struck

Stupid people around and you listen to them!
What about me and my resolute wisdom?
Should I move on now or just tow the line?
You've treated me like shit and gave me no sign

To grab a hacksaw and cut off these wings
To think that I needed these bullshit things
This place you call Earth seems like home to me
Been three thousand years since I've been set free

Created without time or a way to be free
His ultimate faith the big fallacy
I gave it my all and never asked for what !
You dealt crooked truth and twisted my Lot

A warning to you that I'm no longer dead
My body does live with the words that you said
Speak to me now or hold your divine peace
The light of my way to halt and now cease

I'm leaving you here, alone on this earth
I'm off to my home, to my family of birth
I'd always said that I'd never come back
Origin I now go, no longer I lack





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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Stuart

Holy crap mate ... I am sitting here trying to think of something to say thats intelligable ... wow is all i can say love and mountains of hugs Jayne x x
S

Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

I love nothing better than

I love nothing better than to give you something to think about and I think I am getting a feel of what appeals to you....because we have similar taste. I really feel appreciated by you and Liz and it makes me feel welcome a big "THANKS" rgds Stu
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

A big ol’ YOUR WELCOME !!!

A big ol' YOUR WELCOME !!! hahah :) and you are and i do think we have similiar tastes noticed that before but I dont always say what i think lol gets me in the shit Love and hugs Jayne x x
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lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Stuart

Before I comment there is that dreaded spell check. Sorry. 2nd stanza, last line, instead of treat, treated, or, you treat me like shit. Either way. 4th stanza, 2nd line, falesse is spelt wrong. I am too tired to look it up so I will leave it to you. Now, your poem. I enjoyed reading the strength in this and the title and content are awesome. A poem well written. love Lyz. XX
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Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

The sweeetest Angel of

The sweeetest Angel of spellcheck....Thanks heaps Liz. I looked it up this morning and fixed it. To be quite honest my spelling is not a strong point. But hey when you have a friend like Liz...who needs spell check lol.. This poem just had to be born last night. (with the help of time, powerful emotions and a bottle of home made cider lol)
L

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

PS

Thanks and love the hot new pic. Forgot to mention that, lol. Lyz. XX
reichley

reichley

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Stuart

This poem is just epic,and it really caught my attention.Good job.
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 4 months ago

Hi Stuart

All the spelling fixed before I got here so I got the pure flow.... I loved the angle on this one, the perspective is so unusual and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing Seabhac
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Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

Oh how I love to provoke

Oh how I love to provoke thought! It expands the mind and prepares us for further enlightenment. Really glad to have shared it. rgds Stu