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Dec 29, 2009
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To look beyond these things
I deny the wretched hollow chasm
The promise of your cynicism
The harsh welt of your criticism
I’m smiling anyway
… don’t toss me your dark cloud today
I’ll paint my life for dancing where I can
And in between, frenetic preparation
With the happy scent, anticipation
A frozen moment sweet
Falls gently to my feet
We don’t need approval anyway
Just pull back the blind
And see! Life’s fractal bright display
The treasures gather in our mind
Play hypocrisy and lust in style
The discord you habituate
You tug the strings to deviate
I turn my back for peace
And thus I find release
The promise of your cynicism
The harsh welt of your criticism
I’m smiling anyway
… don’t toss me your dark cloud today
I’ll paint my life for dancing where I can
And in between, frenetic preparation
With the happy scent, anticipation
A frozen moment sweet
Falls gently to my feet
We don’t need approval anyway
Just pull back the blind
And see! Life’s fractal bright display
The treasures gather in our mind
Play hypocrisy and lust in style
The discord you habituate
You tug the strings to deviate
I turn my back for peace
And thus I find release
— Cloudthings, Dec 29, 2009
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Orphani
16 years 5 months ago
I want to say somthing witty
Cloudthings
16 years 5 months ago
it is a hybrid & I can understand your response
Arrow
16 years 5 months ago
Yes, needs some cut and polish
Cloudthings
16 years 5 months ago
the fractal unfolding of life
HiddenNotebook
16 years 5 months ago
… don’t toss me your dark cloud today
Cloudthings
16 years 5 months ago
I love clouds so much they bring me pleasure even if theyre dark
Geezer
16 years 5 months ago
Choosing ...
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
the more I know, the less I know I know!!!!
Nordic cloud
16 years 5 months ago
"To thine own self be true" ah yes!
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
If I was rich I'd fly you here on a whim, wouldn't it be lovely.
Atticus
16 years 5 months ago
I say bravo!
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
I think writers might often feel like they are not "seen" so oft
Aireal Steed
16 years 5 months ago
hello,I do believe the
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
Hope you're enjoying Neo. I will come visit as soon as I can
seabhac
16 years 5 months ago
I really enjoyed this
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
I was happy with that line... that sentiment really, glad you li
faerybeki
16 years 5 months ago
Darling Anni, I so enjoy all
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
gorgeous winged sister, how lovely to see you here, it is a rush
Worldwide Freeride
16 years 5 months ago
I love your spirit here...
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
& thanks for your warm wishes, I return them with abundant
SophieHannah24
16 years 3 months ago
??????
Cloudthings
16 years 3 months ago
about finally finding the grace,courage & skill to allow adverse