Smashed within my glass heart

this is absolutely ;orsm; a lovely poem in the memory of your uncle very lovely words all my love & kisses your hubby snake xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Seren you touch me with your poetry..I feel..I hear..I see what of you write.. It is so tender and so meaningful. This one is great my lady. Have you written a book that I may purchase as I have this connection to your words like I do to Anna from Norway. A vivid picture in my mind as I read this one. I do hope you are feeling better everyday and your picture is beautiful if only in color, your eyes are the eyes of a beautfiul woman, Your face so tender as your heart and yes the toughness comes through also. Have you ever modeled before? You should you got that beautiful face my friend. Much love sent your way and health to heal you. Much prayer also Ms Mona

The first few stanzas were very descriptly written but somehow seemed removed from you ( possibly intentional )and were it not for the last stanza that grabbed you into full emotive response I would not have known it was yours. If this loss is a recent one I would say subconciously you have not yet accepted the passing. I am loving the freedom you are finding in the balance of the blocks of words. Hugs Seabhac

To protect myself from what I might feel if the unthinkable should ever happen to me, I imagine my son's death. Morbid, I know, but the opposite of, "it could never happen to me" and so I think it, I get ready for it. Your images are descriptive of every truth there is in losing a loved one. I hope I never have to write this; thinking it, reading it, is unbearable enough. Still, I thank you. Lisa

You feel the emotion, and the power in the writing, and you are moved. Thats what it's all about. Reaching out with words. Giving your deepest experiences of life. Reaching into other hearts, and bonding through the expression, and so we all carry a little of you within. A tragic personal experience at the death of a loved one is my read.The emotional trama of the "snapshot" moment in time that changes your life forever. Opinions: The poem flows very well off the tounge; nice cadence, and rythem with economy, and emphisis nicely placed. A few areas for your consideration: I think as a title; simply "glass heart" says it all Line 1 when the bowl line 11 as each glass piece seventh stanza line 1 My blood pouring to smashed brings to preasant tense ( more vivid ) wow, really expresses how I feel about your poetic acomplishments. I know you worked very hard on your art to get to this point Jayne and you are an inspiration to all the poets who have watched your evolution into the acomplished poet you have become.I know whatever you set your heart on you will achieve. B

It is easy to see what is in your heart. Your heart is transparent, it pours from between your fingers like a strong light shows around the edges of a door. We see the bond between you and a favorite uncle. As long as someone remembers.... ~ sorry for your loss, love and hugs, ~ Gee

This is a poem that forces the mouth to close and the air, bundled, satuating in carbon, unexpressed, to wait. Wonderful. Brian

Oh Jayne... you are on a roll (no not a ham one!) here this flow much like your pervious one... with each moment in time shattered with its fall as the glass is scattered. But it does cut deep into memory. The final part where the binding ties of the world unknot and the spirit is released into the shadowless realm is flabbergasting... and makes you close you eyes and see the light. A great tribute to someone I suspect (although I don't know who!?) and I think they would stand proud and shine a ethereal light down on you for such a write. Excellent again! Dale :)

My condolances on the loss of your uncle Jayne.To know love is the greatest of lifes gifts.That bond of the heart you write aboutI know only too well.Having lost someone very dear to me also, but the love we give lives on, and I believe God will raise him up as he promised.Love B

Her I come falloloping along too late and yet not to late to comment. I second dear Mona' sentiments as among other things you are beautiful I agree. And that kind of beauty can never fade, its there in your eyes described. The plunge of death a breath of wind and yet a leaden weight weighs down our feelings as we hear and see the person loved speak in our hearts, it takes away our breath and leaves us saddened, helpless. limp, and as you say time heals, and yet the memory never fades of joys and happy moments. Your poem describes this so well dear empathetic Jayne, you have loved well and been loved for this I'm sure, if not you deserve our love and more. Ann sends her love to you Jayne and the family too.

Wow, very powerful. I love it. Dani :)

but true to heart!!! You have an amazing way with words and love it and you!! :)xxxxx

Dear Lady Jayne My sympathies right now to you and yours Now with the angels in safe arms lay on this his very special day As long as someone remembers they will always be love So in your heart he will always remain Each shard of glass a precious memory to make you smile each day sorry feeling pretty low at this time take time my friend always Electric Blue