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breathing gods
I often wonder where
people who place their lives
in the shallow palms
of gods who breath
find hope.
The waking of the powerless
lends beauty to our
sun-drenched tomorrows
yet they wake and forget
the exact same
sun-drenched yesterdays
that failed to dry tears,
silence car alarms,
allay not-so-dormant fears,
or sate bloated bellies.
I never feared,
you would be one
such breathing god.
I placed you as high
as my arms could reach
and you kept me mum
with sweet-soft lullabies.
I feel so old now
like a child lost to age
and disappointment.
It seems, my breathing god,
your powers faded
with my youth:
my eyes grew
accustomed to the truth.
The spell is broken now
dear breathing god,
The cord of birth
that held me to you
stretches tight and thin.
Lives placed in the shallow
palms of breathing gods
are laced with
the same tint
of bitterness,
so like a lamb
trailing the path
of a doomed flock
I too shall hope,
though never in gods
sown with the same thread
of fallibility and fallacy.
Critiques
Bonitaj
16 years 5 months ago
Wow Jozi!
kowque
16 years 5 months ago
thank you…i thought this
Seren
16 years 5 months ago
Kowque
kowque
16 years 5 months ago
another jozi girl
Baz
16 years 5 months ago
Very powerful, I enjoyed the
kowque
16 years 5 months ago
thank you
R.M.Shanmugam
16 years 5 months ago
i appreciate your writing.
Orphani
16 years 5 months ago
To have a voice you must
kowque
16 years 5 months ago
this is exactly what i
Orphani
16 years 5 months ago
No, there is no more meaning
Bonitaj
16 years 5 months ago
and I think I shall return again
Atticus
16 years 4 months ago
Late coming across this