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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Dec 25, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

She’s Gone

She’s Gone

She walked alone
Darkness
By Night
Darkness
By Day
Love broken

Pain
Tears
Heart
Sleep
Eternal

He walked alone
Darkness
By Night
Darkness
By Day

Remembering
By Day
The Times
Togetherness
No more

Truth of love
Removed
Stand
Alone
Special place
— Barbara Writes, Dec 25, 2009

About This Poem

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Barbara

THIS is my new favourite of yours wonderful write my friend only have one suggestion but its just that, take want you need and throw what you dont find relevent Love once true Remove [removed] Standing [to stand] Alone Once Special hope you are having a wonderful xmas day ... with all my love Jayne x x
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Jayne

Thanks for the suggestion. I totally agree. I had it that way but somehow change it in the revision. I am working on a new style of writing. This is the first of many I will write before I get the form I am striving for down. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Barbara … since I have

Barbara ... since I have been here I have seen your writing go forward in leaps and bounds ... I am eagerly watching to see which way you go, you were one of the first people i read here ... love Jayne x x
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Jayne

Thanks I really appreciate that you take interest in my writing. I am about to embark on a new style of writing. I first must learn it. This poem is a start of another leap. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

has the air of profundity, Barbara

only question the line Love once true has the ring of cliche. not sure what to suggest. Maybe Truth of love Removed just a thought. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Profundity

Thanks, I like your suggestion. I wanna think on it a bit to see how truth of love flow in my mind. It take a little time for things to sink into my poetic eye. I took the cliche out while I meditate on this great line. I have learned the meaning of lots of words from you since coming here. Mostly because you use them to describe me. *S* profundity-- I like. It is interesting you use this word because I just tonight learn what it means to write poetry using single words to describe an event, something, or someone while trying to understand postmodern writing. This is my first attempt though it may not be postmodern. I took something simple as two people separated and make it more dramatic by letting her die. Then allow him to realize after her death that she was his true love or the truth of love. Glad it turned out okay. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

it turned out better than ok, it's great.

Once I was your mentor, now I choose to read you as a poet. No, it is not postmodern. The classic postmodern line about love is from Umberto Eco (who is very worth reading, unlike most postmodern theorists he is friendly and generous, not verbose and obscure)- "I love you madly" he said self-consciously. Read anything by Eco, his novel "The Name Of The Rose" gives the best definition of semiology I have ever read. "The Truth About The Truth" edited by Walter Anderson is a collection of essays that gives insight into every aspect of postmodernism. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks for the great

You reading me as a poet rather than a student makes me overwhelmingly grateful. I remember you saying I provoke you with my bad grammar *S*. My grammar is getting easier to remember now. I couldn't have ask for a better mentor. I will read more of Eco and Walter Anderson. I may not be your protege any more but I'm still learning -- verbose and obscure still broading my vocabulary. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Barbara

A charmingly concise little tale, so complete. This is good Barbara, I specially liked the way you made the days repeat themselves giving the feeling of time going by. Love Ann of Norway.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

feeling of time going by

that is exactly what i wanted to do thanks for noticing that. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
C

chrisbyrne

16 years 5 months ago

your words

Stark and harsh, just as a break-up is. Brutal! one person freeing themselves and another left wrecked. It got to me!
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Chris

Thanks for reading and commenting. I wanted to show strong emotions with the least amount of words. Thanks for sharing thoughts. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
BB

bowmore bill

16 years 5 months ago

Poetry/ prose

Hi barbera, i like d this, well written, also read well. I;m afraid that's life, it happens and we just have to get on with it. Lol xx
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

bowmore bill

Thanks for reading and commenting. Poetry/prose--i am happy you noticed it because I want to familiarize myself with prose. I guess my interest in prose has crept into this poem. A good thing. Yes life, getting on with it is the best way to heal I suppose. lol xx ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Barbara

A lovely poem from the heart. Excellent, you have been busy dear, and I will be glad to finally catch up on some of your work. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Lyz

Thanks, I'm looking forward to you reading them. I am on school break now so I have more time to participate. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
C

childof21

16 years 5 months ago

i really love this one. i

i really love this one. i love the second paragraph. this is my new favorite poem on the site
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

childof21

This is my new favorite poem on the site. Thanks for saying that you are the sweetest. Life goes on and we keep living ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara