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Ink Dragon
Dec 23, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Initiation

 unscrew mebreak the seal ver-atrine mouthvoraciously open ryegrass watersthe gin is sprung olive fleshflashes serve mestraight up  thenleave me on the bar topfor consumption shaken

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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Nina

I can only *smile* and say Bravo :) well done dear woman this ones one of your best love and hugs Jayne x x
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne,

thank you so much for the smile and the compliment. Love and hugs back. Yours, ~Nina
Tam the Chanter

Tam the Chanter

16 years 4 months ago

boo-hoos

A fine martini of a poem , perhaps an introductory to a longer piece on the bar - room bosom buddies we all know. "Drink to me only with thine eyes......". Yours Ian
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Ian,

you never fail to make me laugh with your comments. Thanks. Yours, ~Nina
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

NINA!!!

bELIEVE IT OR NOT!! I was thinking of a poem around the title SHAKEN NOT STIRRED and you've pipped me to the post! Not that I had the content though ;) Excellent piece! Loved the spacing! You go girl! Tschuess Boni
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

NINA!!!

sorry - repeated in all the excitement!
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Boni,

how funny is this, I was just commenting on your "woman's ashram" while you were commenting here. Great minds think alike :) Do share your own "shaken, not stirred" poem. Debbi (tink) is to blame for this one, she challenged me to write a poem with these words. Yours, ~Nina
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Woman, you’d drive any

Woman, you'd drive any many to drink. lol. Thanks a lot Ian, now I can't get that song out of my head! Hugs. p.s. Over my son's now, leaving this afternoon. Hopefully, we'll stay one step in front of the inclement weather forecast. Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

haha, Anna,

this thread is so much fun, isn't it? Have a safe journey. (hugs) Yours, ~Nina
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Hello Damo,

nice to meet you. Thanks for the short, sweet comment. Yours, ~Nina
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Nina...

I rarely drink anymore, but hell, I want one of those... couldn't help myself, lack of will power kicking in. enjoyed this Nina!
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Richard,

lack of will power... hope it wasn't my poem that did it? Anyhow, blame everything on me and the bad influence I am having on you, dear moonman ;) Yours, ~Nina
Tam the Chanter

Tam the Chanter

16 years 4 months ago

blame

Nina I tried to blame everything on you too, but my wife don't buy it. she asked how an Irish pop group could be a bad influence. I said it was because the singer was named after a dog biscuit and I think I might have got away with it! Yours Sanity Clause xx
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bjp

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Nina

My grandmother would say, "Now you're off to the races!" This is a sexy little number. I had never heard of veratrine - a poison no less. Thank you for the new word. There are some terrific lines in this peom - in fact, it would be much easier to list only the good lines. Easily five stars for nerve and craftsmanship. Brian
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Brian,

thank you for your perseverance and your insight. You have no idea how hard it can be to make me change even a word. I must really hold you in high regard... Yours, ~Nina
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adjei agyei-baah

16 years 4 months ago

What a piece

you always write with a touch of eclat and professionality.You are true genious with command over the language.The lines were short but yet talking.Perfect imagery and diction.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Hello Sinnbadd,

what a comment. I think I just blushed... Hope your Christmas is a bright and happy one. Yours, ~Nina
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Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

This poem, though simple in

This poem, though simple in its form, exemplifies what I prize so much in any poetic work, and that is the layered duality of meaning, expressed in the metaphor.Adding to that, it has another aspect that I treasure, and that is simplicity of form that conveys on its own, the layered complexity within. A stark kick in the ass piece of work worthy of the Dragons ink. Barry ...o..
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you, Barry,

kick in the ass, that just made my day! Hope you are having wondeful holidays. Yours, ~Nina
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Amethyst

16 years 4 months ago

wow

SO honest...I loved it peace Sofie
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 4 months ago

Loved this introspective poem Nina, delicate & yet effectively p

Loved this introspective poem Nina, delicate & yet effectively powerful. Lovely work, I miss you (but will be relatively absent for yet another month or so)... My love & best wishes for a wonderful2010 for you & yours precsious one. xx Cheers Anni~ "To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." ~William Shakespeare, Hamlet.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you, Anni,

you are missed here, too. Keeping my fingers crossed for a great new year, and for more Neo time for both of us. (Have only been really "back" for a week, since the holidays started, and will have to work again from next week, busy January is coming up...) Yours, ~Nina