Seren

Dec 24, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Three Cluey Blokes

I had wandered a path
and followed a star
traveling northwards
it was quite bizarre

this will inside
was not my own
but something foreign
ill have you know

I finally rested
at a palms broad feet
wiped off my face
the night I did greet

far into the darkness
a stable was lit
then I knew
stars had brought me to this

for a god made flesh
was right there inside
only just born
with Gabriel beside

there on a hill
three men did appear
on camels they traveled
without any fear

Magi had come
to honour the birth
down from their camels
their feet touched the earth

the first of the men
approached in awe
sat down offerings
of gold and myrrh

the third of the gifts
frankincense's the air
for it was presented
with a humble flair

Gold for the king
of all time
Frankincense'd
priestly he is divine

finally they laid down
the urn of myrrh
for a sacrifice was made
of that I am sure

— Seren, Dec 24, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Rett

16 years 5 months ago

Well crafted Jayne

Not to mention it is beautiful. Goodwill to all! Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Rett

Thanks for the read I really appreciate it ... I hope you and yours are having a wonderful eve .. much love from me and mine Jayne-Chloe x x x

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Just lovely Jayne

Ah and awe great Have a lovely Christmas Seabhac

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Seabhac

thanks heaps for the message and I hope your having a wonderful xmas morning .... love and hugs Jayne x x x

Geezer

16 years 5 months ago

You're not late, just a little behind. I knew that the Christmas spirit wouldn't desert you. It just had to keep poking at you to get you moving. A wonderful write, that says we need to stop and look at the spirit of the holiday. It is about the gift that we were given, not the gifts we give. Hope that your Christmas was as good as you deserve. [Ha, Ha, yours is over, and mine is still to come.] P.S. Did Snake give you a motorcycle for Christmas? I know he...I mean you want one. LOL I just saw one of those commercials that shows some guy giving his wife some new power tools for Christmas. She says Aw honey, you shouldn't have, and you see her thinking about the things she can do with them, while he is thinking about what he can do with them. Funny! Love and higgest bugs, from me and mine, ~ Jason had to leave a special hello from him. ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Gee

Its only 3pm but the best parts over lol for the kids anyway .. hope you and Jason and your wonderful family are having a great day ... and I just read your message to snake he roared laughing ... you take care huni and I will be round later on tonight mountains of hugs and love Jayne x x x x

lyz

16 years 5 months ago

What sort of spirit? lol.

Just joking, although, the cowboy was tasty. I enjoyed this poem, I was a little singing angel many, many years ago, in the choir for a play about this at school. You hear nothing about this now. Lovely. XX

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Lyz

LOL good on ya rub it in ... couldnt sleep the rains pissing down here so loud cant hear ourselves think but i am NOT whinging its cooled the place down and i am revelling in it ... you take care hun glad you liked this old story resurrected in my own way lol love and hugs Jayne x x x

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 5 months ago

Lol love the title name!

Three cluey blokes.... could three well off pissed up geezers with the spirit they helped make over the centuries! They came tumbling out of a barn with huge skins of wine and mead and came across a stable with a new born in it... and because of all the spirits they had drunk they were very merry and thought well here you go Mary and Joe have these gifts on us! So here end the ballad of the three cluey blokes who gave us christmas spirit, the idea of giving gifts and the term Merry Christmas! lol! Sorry Jayne not meaning to have a go at the religious implications here just a happy go lukcy view of the season. This is really good and a good take on the story from a slightly different view... you could make a nativity screen play from your write here. Well worded and just right for the festive season too! Bravo... take it to the stage... and then take a bow! Dale :)

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Dale …..I love the

Dear Dale ..... I love the story of the three wise men .. I was trying to get some xmas spirit lol belated better late than never ... hahaha love that you liked the title takes a bow lol thanks for taking a look at this one much appreciated love and hugs Jayne x x x