Duality

I have no joy in uniform samenessFactory moulded likeness. The artistic way ofDuality creating differences. Same sourced elementsIn truth one materialIn fact two varying entitiesInteresting for their differences Not seen as disabilitiesOnly the finished view varyingContent and source the sameNever creating identical Each differentEach with meaningEach with purposeThe wise know thisAnd search for both

— seabhac, Dec 24, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

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seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks Kal

You are right, the thought stacking of ideas and ideals is often the beginning. This does need personalised, maybe just internalised. Ah yes to get inside the words and impart emotion. A rewrite yes , a challenge definatly. Thanks for taking the time to point this out. Have a good holiday time. Seabhac

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Seabhac

I have to say its not the same as your others it felt flat ... maybe I am tired will come back for another read in the light its 3am lol sorry had a huge day getting ready for xmas love and hugs and merryxmas its already here lol Jayne x x x

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Merry Christmas Jayne

No not you tired ,me , being in another place and putting up this poem too soon. Yes it is flat and thanks for being honest that is important here. I will go for a rewrite in a different frame of mind. Hope the Hols are peaceful and happy for you Much love Seabhac

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

I came back for another read

I came back for another read and I know what thats like, I have often been too anxious to post and done it early , now if its not ready i wait till it is, its been xmas its no wonder your mind was elsewhere I will keep my eye out for the rewrite this is going to be a wonderful poem ... I would love to tweak it a little,but only if you would like and see what I cant come up with the theme is something thats very appealing and I have some ideas let me know I would be happy to ... got my creative juices going again I was so tired the other night so sorry for my short comment have been buggared lately but i got a decent sleep for xmas lol hope you and yours had a peacful xmas and a joyful one hugz Jayne x x

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Jayne

I would be gratfeful for feedback on this. I have changed the poem but somehow it only holds a thread of the former one. It has changed and I am uncertain if it works or not. I do appreciate the time you gave to comming back , that other little poem was bursting out and had to be heard first. Seabhac

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Liz I am going to copy it

Liz I am going to copy it and work on it tonight I will post on here before i go to bed hun ... and I am glad to be able to help it has changed but I will go back to your orginal and show you what i thought to do ??? in the other one I thought that a few different words and moved around would make all the difference love and hugs Jayne x x

lyz

16 years 5 months ago

I must be from Mars

I found this poem to be a matter of fact, well thought out and an interesting topic. I agree with the content as well. I must know though, what inspired this write? Any way, it may not be your usual, but I found nothing wrong. Love Lyz. XX

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks Lyz

I changed it and it is very interesting how your comments were different...I feel it is even a different poem...an edit is a difficult thing to do sometimes , knowing what to keep and what to throw away and still keep the bones. I do feel this is the body of another poem altogether so no not Mars just a different moon Thanks Seabhac