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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Dec 23, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Figure of Hate

The Figure of Hate

Hate stands tall as a tree
With branches broad as the sea
Hate hides in the depths of the forest
Harboring much sorrow

Hate unleashes its fury
Upon the unsuspecting in a great scurry
Then retreats to the forest
Harboring much sorrow
— Barbara Writes, Dec 23, 2009

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Barbara !!! wonderful write

Barbara !!! wonderful write ... only one suggestion ... first line second stanza unleashes ? or unleashed ... I think would give it ooomppph :) love and hugs Jayne x x x
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Jayne

I totally agree it should be unleashes. Here me again with the grammar. I did write this kind of quickly. thanks for the reminder. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Julie

Thanks for the suggestion, but I think a third verse might be more than necessary to make the figure of hate poetically visible. Strong it is and not so easy to describe. I was thinking about giving each verse another line making it five a piece. I think that might work. thanks for reading and commenting I really appreciate. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara