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Barren cream pearls and glitter

There is a tree on the hills' mountain
wearing
tapered glass sleeves, leaking glittered ice
trickling, dazzling diamond dust down dusty dry bark
stark,
bleak bare beauty
clothed and coated with,
crushed cream pearls
flurried against the hill
recklessly riding rolling land

floating
twirling twisting
snaking, sneaking
into extended reaching branches
hooked and gnarled
crooked and crossed
accentuated against contrasting backdrops
infinite pale grey blue horizon
redundant sun sitting muted
setting ghost like and silent

long
spiked
blackest of shadows
stealing, stretching
across spectrum sprinkled landscapes
stars greet  ghost sun goodbye
sparkling
crushed pearls become
calm lulling ocean
lapping
frosted frozen roots
of the tree on the hills' mountain.

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

I can hardly curb my

I can hardly curb my enthusiasm for your poem Madame. It has me dancing in circles. ~A Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Hi Vicki,

A practise poem, is it? Doesn't read like one. You have vivid and intriguing imagery here. It's a treat to read - apart from the odd misspelling and some punctuation issues... There is a tree on the hill's mountain - trickling, dazzling diamond dust down dusty dry bark - bleak bare beauty (reads better w/o commas) - recklessly riding rolling land (reads better w/o commas) - redunant sun sitting muted (redundant?) - across sparkling, spectrum sprinkled landscapes (spectrum sprinkled, reads better) - of the tree on the mountain's hill. I enjoyed your winter tree :) Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Vicki

LOL practice ? I think you havent even reached your stride yet and when you do ... wooooeeee look out ... all Ninas suggestions are sound ... I look forward to the edits ... love and hugs Jayne x x