The Second Time Around

POWDER SOFT WHISPERS
THROUGH POISONED LIPS PARTING.
RAZOR SHARP LAUGHTER
CUTS PAPER THIN CRIES .

BLACK ROSES BLEEDING
VELVET THICK TEARDROPS ,
PULSE POUNDING PASSION
SWEET SUICIDE .

I'LL SHED NO SHALLOW SHADOW'S TEAR
UPON YOUR HOLLOW GRAVE .
HOW COULD YOU CARE ABOUT ME ?
HOW DARE YOU GO WITHOUT ME !

DO WE DRIFT OR DROWN THE SECOND TIME AROUND ?

CRYSTAL CLEAR CONSCIENCE
CASTING NO SHADOWS ,
NO SOFT SPOKEN SORROWS ,
NO TIME TO SURVIVE .

FASTER AND FASTER,
YOU RACE TOWARD DISASTER.
SLOWER AND SLOWER ,
THE COLD CRIMSON TIDE.

I'LL SCREAM A SECRET SILENT RAGE
UPON YOUR DEAFENED EAR .
HOW CAN I FORGIVE YOU ?
HOW CAN I OUTLIVE YOU ?

DO WE SHIFT OUR GROUND THE SECOND TIME AROUND ?

By Jove !

— jove, Dec 22, 2009

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Region, Country: British Columbia, CAN

Favorite Poets: me, ... what can I say I can't dance. lol

Critiques

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

By Jove

You got it this time ... I loved this one ... and cannot see anything to fault ..except lol one thing I’LL SHEAD NO SHALLOWS SHADOWS TEAR that lines bothering me I will come back and have another look in the morning when my brains functioning again its nearly 3am lol love and hugs Jayne x x

jove

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you excessssss esss on the shallow(s) all fixed

Thank you for seeing that, I obviously did not . lol So glad you like and 5 stars, you are too kind ! By Jove !

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

I couldn’t sleep last

I couldn't sleep last night, must have been your poem screaming in my ear. Shead = shed (as in shed a tear?) shadow's tear (apostrophe denotes ownership--the tear belonging to the shadow) but if you're going for alliteration: NO SHALLOW SHADOW'S TEAR SHALL I SHED UPON YOUR HOLLOW GRAVE. What you think? ~A p.s. why all caps? (quit yelling!) imo it detracts from a damned righteous poem! p.p.s. i quit the star business

jove

16 years 5 months ago

"I'm shouting and I don't know why !" lol

I wrote it with the capslock on and was too lazy to change it ; Oops! My Bad . I'll post a funny pill next ok? That should take care of your virtual headache ! lol Ya, I make lots of smelling pisstakes; dang lazy Frenchman ! lol The problem being , we write as fast as we speak ! By Jove !

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

well…. Monsieu Joveski….

well.... Monsieu Joveski.... I sho 'nuff 'ope there are SOME things that you take your sweet time with... Eh? ~A & quit piss'n on ur takes Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.

jove

16 years 5 months ago

Ah ya there are ! lol

I am slow at a lot of things, "too slow", according to some people ! lol By Jove !