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of mirrored reflections on shattered glass

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— Seren, Dec 21, 2009

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Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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bjp

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe

A devistatingly good poem. A huge poem speaking of the real horrors of life and death - the need to obtain permission to die. Looking after love until the strength is what resides in fingernails alone. You have become a great communicator, Jayne-Chloe. Big big hugs, Brian
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Brian

thanks for your comment it means the world when someone can see and with the clarity you do ... I think your one of few people that can read me and understand exactly what I am on about ... thats a gift not all share biggest hugs Jayne x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

God, woman, you ask too

God, woman, you ask too much. ~Mum p.s. mirrors are plural, not singular, possessive p.p.s. title: of mirrored reflections on shattered glass (?)
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

I could never ask … I

I could never ask ... I would wait till it come of its own volition you inspired this poem love you Ma Jayne x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

One big , no huge, GYNORMOUS(!) sigh dear Jayne

A strange nightmare of a poem that when listened to, yes listen! It can orchestrate the shattering of the mirrors with such intensity that the pieces get caught in our eyes as we read it and we bleed in sympathy with its mysterious message; cry out in our sleeping thought cycles and are left without speech. One big , no huge, GYNORMOUS(!) sigh dearest Jayne, may your mirrors reflect the beauty of your 'soul' and make you ever joyful. Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Enchantress of the northern

Enchantress of the northern lights ... Brians comment says it all ... and I dont know where it come from but its my expression of a reality we all face ... thankyou for your kind words they alight on my page everytime its like a glimmer of life has come alive in your words ... may you have a wonderful Christmas and I will be sending some emails out Xmas eve ... a little something I have saved for the people who have kept me UP all these months ... love to you dear Ann (huggles)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Jayne in her gown of dazzling beauty

Oh shine bright leader of our minds your stoic face against the wind your charmed and lovely poetry though with its shaded side gives hope and joy in difficulty we learn from you your pride of stance your trace of meaning your flashes of inspired happiness do glitter in our minds a thousand, thousand times like diamonds fine so big so beautiful we reflect this shower of love of life of all you meet and sing in chorus we love you as you are, we love you for what your write we love you for what you do to us we love the very spark that expresses this your life as art we love you from our heart. Just Ann. P.S. I wrote this just now, just here, no notes, just now for you dearest sweet, kind and loving Jayne.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

You dear sweet woman … I

You dear sweet woman ... I am just floored by your poem its just beautiful ... thank you lady of the lights ... I am going to bed with a massive smile and a glimmer of a poem I need to write for you :) ... love you darlin lady I cannot thank you enough ... love and higgliest hugs Jayne x x x x(huggles) may showers of petals reign over every path you walk to soften your journey always
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Damo

16 years 5 months ago

You packed so much in there

You packed so much in there with so few words ...lush...moist...green...dense...shadowy...air...
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

glad you liked it I do try

glad you liked it I do try and economize with words sometimes but lots I write longer poems kind regards love Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Barry,There is a kind

Dear Barry, There is a kind of darkness in this ... thanks for taking a look ...FINALLY today I get to answer some comments lol everytime I logged in we got more visitors lol anyway will be round reading in a little while and see what you have been up to ... kind regards love Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Well I will stay real still

Well I will stay real still in hopes i dont shake you off ... and if you felt it was for you ? it was it was for anyone who could find themselves in it ... thanks for your beautiful comment love and hugs Jayne x x