Dirty Little Fairy

I love it.... the poem itself can use re-editing, but damn I, too, would like to cut that dirty little bitch's wings off. Great visual and we all have that little bit of evil in us, eh? Thanks for the morning smiles. By the way, I love yours. ~A Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.

This is something of a sweet ditty with hard edges and it works well apart from a few places where the rhythm breaks down a little due to choice of words or line length (for example, some of the lines go down to five syllables when the rhythm for me expects a minimum of six). I'm not sure why you switch from "Little dirty fairy" in the first two verses to "Dirty little fairy" afterwards, but for me the latter trips off the tongue better and when you read it you can really emphasise the "D" in "Dirty" even more. So here, as always, is a slight suggested edit: Dirty little fairy you sit upon the wall, playing with your wisdom; always laughing when i fall. Dirty little fairy for all the world to see, you share your wisdom with them; so why not share with me? Dirty little fairy, blind smiles in mocking eyes; why always do you smirk at my life’s nasty surprises? You dirty little fairy, be gone from on my wall, before i cut your wings off and laugh when it's you who fall. Hope this is of some help. All the best Keith

Well, Madame, you got me with this one, enjoyed it a great deal, I look forward to seeing what else you have written, hope you're enjoying Neo. Cheers Anni~ "To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." ~William Shakespeare, Hamlet. H.H. the Dalai Lama