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Benjamin1987
Benjamin1987
Dec 17, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

No Hot Water But a Warm Heart

No hot water
in the shower

When I think of her
It heats right up

Laying in bed
cold, unable to sleep

Thinking of her
curled up next to me
warms me up
to help me fall asleep

Having a bad day
not able to smile

I think of her smiling face
and one pops up on mine

Missing her
thinking how far away
she is from me

Looking at her picture
knowing that
I will see her again
— Benjamin1987, Dec 17, 2009

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Region, Country: Boston, Massachusetts, USA

Favorite Poets: The Beat Generation

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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Great beginning

Especially the first four lines they are just awesome. Looking forward to reading more. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 5 months ago

Its even better

These are brilliant lines and I love them No hot water in the shower When I think of her It heats right up These are very dearing lines, better than chamomile tea any time *S* Laying in bed cold, unable to sleep Thinking of her curled up next to me warms me up to help me fall asleep ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara