plastic kisses stolen in paper snow

and the imagery in this one really dragged me in to the emotions expressed. I have added some punctuation and just tweaked it in a few places where I felt it perhaps needed to flow more or else words could be omitted or substituted to help extend the images being used. At the end "the tangent linger of ghost kisses" sounded great but I assume you meant "tangent" to imply touch rather than its actual geometric meaning. I believe therefore that the word you intended may have been "tangible" and that then required a slight change to rest of the line to keep the flow going. Anyway, as always, these are just some suggestions for you to consider. All the best Keith Plastic kisses thieved in a silent night city, stretched upon teeth of frosted paper snow. Fierce yellow lamps muted, snow drizzle dimmed in hazy glow. Singsong fashion laughter sung light, hand squeezing mine, clinging on tight. Limbs jingle-jangle jelly slip-sliding on the hem of winter's pretty lace. Manic feet stumble giggling, grappling, flailing like Bambi caught in blaring headlights. In one moment time frozen still, breath steamed pink ice-frosted cheeks, tasting Jack Daniel's lips behind closed eyes. All mine..... if only just for now. All the sorrys for what you cannot give placed upon my fingertips, burnt there by lips that do not speak of wanted tomorrows. "I’ll steal you", "I’ll steal you", I chant to my self, the kid of can’t haves fighting thick grabbing what’s not their’s. I’m taking this hand, holding it, never letting go. You smell like you want me, whisper what i think, with your eyes. Many moments robbed by us, placed in my memory box sealed forever shut with tangible, lingering ghost kisses, their sweetness unbittered by mourning not meant to Be’s.

but Keiths suggestions were excellent. In places it read like lists of words, Cheers, Jess, whose nature is irrepressible

I really liked all of Keiths suggestions ... and its a wonderful theme i will be back later on with my stars when you have finished your edit ... would like to pretty it up times five ;) lol take care and ill keep my eye open for the edits love and hugs Jayne x