Seren

Dec 14, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

tempered in the rage

There are no gentle movements
into a calm goodnight

there is a rage
of intemperance
in the stupidity
of attempting to mark,
as to be in memory

there is no remembrance

as one I arrived bare
maggots my butlers,
devouring each and every
shedding,
eventually
being their main
course

and a life in circles moves

a thousand years
shall pass in the spinifex,
the dust shall blow
across the page
of my existence

scratching out all
I ever was

generations vortex from the future,
and stretch through to brush my mind

A memory before their time

— Seren, Dec 14, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

CyberSpace

16 years 5 months ago

love the last three lines

love the last three lines and more than that love hubby xoxoxox

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks for reading this one

Thanks for reading this one darlin .. love your floozey x x x mwah

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

This is a poem I can not

This is a poem I can not swallow. I'd have to eat the paper it was written on. Bow. ~Mum Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Mum

Thats one of the best compliments I could get ... would you like fries with that lol haha I shall send it to you, got your picture today going to post tomorrow :) love and hugs Jayne x x

bjp

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

The poem itself is so good as to be an arguement against its content. Here the poem is swallowing its own tail. That is not easy to do. I do believe your "natural" tallent is showing. Brian

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Brian

This one just came out after I read your dylan Thomas poem yesterday ... what you see here is one writing no edits bar a couple of smallish tweaks ... and I can say I like it ...thats a first .. big smile I was a little unsure if I should have it eating its own tail but being a conundrum in my own right lol thought maybe it could work love and hugs Jayne x x x

Candlewitch

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Jayne

I am speechless... having said that, here are my favorite lines: a thousand years shall pass in the spinifex, the dust shall blow across the pages of my time scratching out all I ever was spi·ni·fex [sp?n? fèks] (plural spi·ni·fex·es or spi·ni·fex) noun Australian grass with pointed leaves: a perennial Australian grass that has sharp pointed leaves and grows in circular mounds in arid inland areas. Genera: Plectrachne Triodia Also called porcupine grass [Early 19th century. From modern Latin, genus name, literally “thorn-maker.”] Encarta® World English Dictionary © & (P) 1999,2000 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved. Developed for Microsoft by Bloomsbury Publishing Plc. I know... I need to get a new dictionary, LOL! Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Cat

This one was inspired by Brians posting and then i was reading your book last night and then Kaboom, here you have it ... Spinifex is holds the earth together and it does ...its everywhere in the outback ... and its also one of the strongest grasses from what i read but that dont take it to the bank,thats memory speaking lol not hard facts ... P.S I got your picture along with Anna's yesterday and i am going to post them in a couple of hours LOL had to laugh at your dictionary reference one of my dictionarys is 100 yrs old its called blackies shilling dictionary it was my nanas and its been a treasure for my writing love and hugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Mmmm

What can I say to this one, well yes, I am once again impressed. Quite deep and a well written poem in full throttle. Dear girl, wonderful. Love Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Darling Nana lolI have

Darling Nana lol I have photos of the ultrasounds on my desktop lol the kids gave them to me yesterday ... first photo of my great niece or nephew lol wooot ;) this one just flew out I dont even know where the hell it come from lol I know what inspired it but yeah it grew love you huni and love to all down there Jayne x x Snake sends his love 2 :)

Lunegirl

16 years 5 months ago

Your poetry is really

Your poetry is really beautiful to read. i've been reading the ones you wrote on annas page to her and then this. I have alot of developing to do lol. I didn't ever really read any poetry after school til i joined this site and im really enjoying some of the work ive been reading. I particularly like your style of writing. Anna is also some one i've been a bit awe struck by. i look forward too reading more love vicki

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Vicki

I just read your comment and smiled thats one of the nicest things you could say i appreciate you coming and having a look at this one its one of my favourites ... and I will tell you something I only started writing seriously myself this yr ... there are no limits but the ones you put on yourself ... and I love reading you as well so I hope along the way i can help you how others helped me ... Anna is a legend I love her poetry and shes not just a great post shes been inspiring and kind and one of the most beautiful souls I have ever met.. I could go on all night lol you get the idea thanks heaps and I will be round in a little while reading seeing what everyones been up to the last couple of days love and hugs Jayne

Bosscombat

16 years 5 months ago

:)

I felt the anger... if you'll let me when I start recording some spoken word id like to record this one....itd be like the band covering a song lol <3 ♣ Pea es. Ill be back to rate and nom.

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Matty

You know your welcome to anytime ... and I would be honoured your voice would suit this one lol I dont have those deep rumbles of yours lol and this one would sound wonderful with your voice love you huni will see you next week woooohoooooo get to see some of my favourite people I am stoked love and higgliest bugs Jayne x x x

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

You just get better and better

And I see you scored the double whammy, Spotlight and Evolution at once. Whatever some might say about rating poetry it certainly reflects how much your work is appreciated. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Jess

I am so happy you liked this one its one of my personal favourites but not for the reason most would guess ... I am humbled still that people love my work and that they are still reading after such a huge change from rhyme to blank verse ... gives me hope I can better myself ... love and biggest hugs ...Jayne x x btw merry christmas its xmas eve :) wooot only one more sleep till the fat man jumps out of his EH lol hahaha

Pixee

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Seren

I love your penning. You truly have power over your pen. It seems like your ink knows just what you want to write. You are very talented writer!! I love the poem and I would give you more than 5 stars, but that is all I am aloud to give you. I am going to respond more often to you and the other wonderful writer's on Neo. I guess that is my New Year's resolution for the year 2010. I hope I can keep it. Keep up the awsome writings. Take care. Friends, Pixee

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Pixee

Soooooooooooo good to see you !!! I hope you had a wonderful xmas ... and nothing like making resolutions lol though I dont .... I appreciate you taking the time out of your holidays to read and I may need to squeeze my head out the door lol you will give me a big head but I love it haha P.S thanks for the add love and biggest hugs Jayne x x