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Because I am an animal

Running by the canal
electric chords drifting
on the wind

autumn cool
on my neglected skin

sunset sinking
deep beneath the flyover

monochrome dusk
forming

as hardened muscles pound
the hardened miles

deliver me to the park

where the good people
are walking their dogs

and playing baseball
on expansive lawns.

And closer now
the airborn riffs

jumping into focus

Japanese cat in
cowboy hat

perched on amp
head bent over red guitar

playing effortlessly
to the swaying trees

Jimi Hendrix code
spilling from his fingers

like some rogue transmission
finally reaching us from 69...

— Heading South, Dec 12, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Daniel

DO NOT TOUCH it in my humble opinion ... you gone and did it again ... slices of life shared, my cousin just married a japanese girl she was a nurse in Tokyo her names Yuka and whenever I read your poetry i feel I get to know a little more of her culture thank you... wonderful poeming again Love and hugss Jayne
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Jayne

Thank you so much. Slices of life - I think that's what poetry should be about. I always seem to write better when I have some real material to work with rather than just sitting in front of my computer waiting for inspiration. I went for a run this afternoon and I could hear these notes floating on the wind from across the river. Then when I arrived at the park I saw that this Japanese guy had a whole drum set and about three different guitars set out under some trees and he was playing this most amazing music. In Japan a lot of people live in small apartments or houses very close together so I guess he didn't want to upset the neighbors. The Japanese are very considerate like that. Anyway the music was so brilliant that I did a few laps of the park just listening to it. It sounded very much to me like something Jimi Hendrix might play and I loved the idea of the music of 1969 being transmitted through time and arriving here in 2009 40 years later! Peace & Love Daniel
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Daniel

Thank you so much for sharing your run with me... Yuka is very Japanese and your right they are the most considerate race on the face of the planet ... we had to tell her she didnt have to wait for an invitation to visit ... very formal but a beautiful woman shes going to have their first baby in Febuary ...and I am a singer so that Image of the lone guitarist will long live with me ... my partner is a Bass player with a band so we have a couple of guitars around the house ... squire 4 string bass ..ashton 4 string bass semi acoustic ..6 string electic montaray.. B.C rich warlock, 6 string electic and a B.C rich beast oh and a 6 string electic legend (replica Ibanez)lol so as you can see the guitar reference got my attention and your poem is wonderful ... someone told me write what you know and its always worked for me ... love and hugs Jayne x x
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Jayne

Yuka sounds like a very typical Japanese. In Japan it is not so common to visit other people's houses and it is certainly considered rude to turn up unannounced. Normally the Japanese will meet each other in restaurants or bars or coffee shops. Their culture is very different and it can be hard for a westerner to understand at first. I've heard that because Japan is such a highly populated country with people living in such close proximity they have to be very considerate just for things to run smoothly. They say that in Japan the nail that stands out gets hammered down and it is true that everyone is under a certain amount of pressure to conform and be subservient to the greater good of society as a whole. This is quite different from the western ethos of individuality. I think this has both good and bad consequences. Sometimes it can be a little suffocating because you are always having to think about how your actions affect other people and how they might be judging you. On the other hand it stops people from being totally selfish as they sometimes are in the west. All I know is that now I have been living here for such a long time it would be quite hard for me to go home - western culture almost feels like an alien culture to me now. There are a lot of good things about Japan. The streets are really clean and the crime rate is very low. You can generally walk about at night without fear of being attacked, and as I mentioned earlier, people are generally very considerate. My parents love visiting Japan because everybody is so polite and respectful. They say it is always a shock to go back to England and notice the contrast! I'm glad you liked the guitar reference. I love music and wish I could actually play an instrument or sing as you do. I learned classical guitar for a while as a child but gave it up because I never really had a passion for the music I was playing. I think if I had learned acoustic guitar it might have been different. I'd love to be able to play songs like Bob Marley's redemption song that have a beautiful timeless quality that can reach across time and cultures and speak to the common humanity in all of us. Maybe one day I will learn how to play. There is definitely something amazing about playing to an audience and connecting with them in a direct way that written poetry can't quite compete with. Though of course originally there wasn't such a big distinction between poets and singers. As troubadours they were one and the same and I always feel that the greatest musicians and singers, people like Bob Dylan, Paul Simon and Tracy Chapman to name but a few, are also amazing poets. Peace and love, Daniel
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Daniel

Yuka is very Japanese Warren my cousin met her on the net and they spoke for nearly two yrs before meeting last xmas ... this christmas they are married and still acclimatising to each other our lifestyles are so different and Yuka has had a massive culture shock but is slowly getting comfortable here ... I had always been fascinated with eastern culture and had learnt a little Japanese ... she has a sense of humor but as you say losing face is a big thing in their culture ... she wouldnt let me visit unless the house was clean for the first couple of months coming from a tiny flat to a huge four bedroom house was a shock for her and she was forever chasing her tail trying to keep it clean ...beautiful woman ... I will be going to Japan in a few yrs with my partner my cousin and his wife ... we have planned it for a few yrs down the track at the moment with babies being born etc isnt a good time for holidays lol I cannot wait I am sure i will love it AND !! Its never too late to learn an instrument ... I am going to learn the violin in the new yr have always wanted to play so I decided I am not putting it off ... and when your learning music you should always learn what you like ... when I was teaching I found that my students excelled when it was music they loved ... your heart has to be in it ... thanks for your message ... hope its not too cold there its hot as hell down here love and hugs Jayne x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

My most recent experience of

My most recent experience of the Japanese was in a news segment. As a Realtor I am familiar with the housing conditions and the mortgages that last generations... I don't remember his name, but he was a well-to-do, educated art curator (or symphony conductor?) who lost his job and subsequently his family (and I suppose face). He was homeless for a some time...now cleans these barely-larger-than-walk-in-closets (complete with kitchenette) for a living. His new work and living quarters. He lives a life of a type of humble, silent gratitude that breaks your heart. I happened to see this segment as I was losing my life-style in the ever-escalating downward economic spiral. Embarrassment/losing face is a phenomenon cutting across all cultures. I wonder if it was he in your park, Dan. Much love and thank you for your poem. ~Anna Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Anna

The real estate market in Japan is totally different to that in the west. In Japan the houses themselves are always losing value and only the land retains its value. The moment someone moves into a new house it starts depreciating, the same way a new car would in America. It is really strange but hardly anyone will move into a second hand house. They will either rent an apartment or build a brand new house from scratch. After 40 or 50 years when the house is considered to be "old" they usually just tear it down and build a new one in its place. That, and the fact that Japan is very earthquake prone, are the reasons why there are hardly any old buildings left outside temples and traditional villages in the countryside. Do you know I have never seen an estate agents office in Japan. There are loads of letting shops but there is hardly any market for second hand houses. This means that once someone buys their first home they very seldom move from it! I actually saw that news segment about the art gallery director who was disowned by his family and made homeless after losing his job. To lose face in Japan can be such a hard thing because everyone puts so much emphasis on their social status etc. Most people closely associate their sense of personal worth with their careers so it can be psychologically as well as financially devastating to lose their jobs. I think being disowned by his family was really harsh though. Maybe there was more to it than merely losing his job, or maybe he was declared bankrupt and thought that distancing himself from his family would allow them to keep the family home etc. I'm sorry to hear that you have been going through something similar in terms of losing your lifestyle. It is extremely unfair (though sadly not surprising) that the bankers who devised the idea of sub prime mortgages should get bailed out while the little people at the bottom of the pyramid are left to pick up the pieces. Peace and love, Daniel