Seren

Dec 10, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Sliver

having dream's of a merry-go-round
with a horse riding jockey
the carnival of thoughts
moved on

from the Colosseum
a roar of lions
watched men
tearing tigers apart

spots in the stripes
brings with it the brutality
of mirroring blood

A breast of the Himalayas
the clouds were the ground
and the black of night was the day

and spinning my wheels
I drift the wall
and mice
wore tracksuits of cheese

usher me into the next show
make it the drama
of chaos

— Seren, Dec 10, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

too much to say so i won’t

too much to say so i won't say anything. how many stars can i give the night? m. Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

This ones fragments but i

This ones fragments but i got dared to submit ... lol love you Jayne x x

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Jayne

Wow! Did you drop some acid or smoke something funny? LOL! What a mixed up muddled up dream turned nightmare. Have you figured out where this one came from, yet? (Much symbolism!) Love, your big sis

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

I know where it comes from but it would take another mind as stuffed up as mine to work it out I think .. Snake dared me to submit lol ... thanks for the read and the comment and no the only drugs I get lately are legal ones lmao ;) love you big Sis Jayne x x

Electric Blue

16 years 6 months ago

sliver

Lady Jayne Dreams always carry messages Merry go round - maybe a fairground memory or thoughts just going around and around thoughts bad memories ripped up blood re currant situatons clouds turn black re the ups and downs of treatment spinning walls tracksuit mice hospitals - Doctors - nurses - uniforms chaos - the noise people rushing around You having no control over you it is out of your hands only time will tell Always blue

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Magz

This was an actual dream it was fucking bizarre and then Snake said i wouldnt be game to post ... my reply was ? i have submitted worse pmsl ... and you maybe in the wrong profession lovely lol you have hit on something !! get outta my head hahaha just joking ;)lol love and hugs Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Sounds like...

Janey in Neoland to me! Hey sometimes legal drugs can give you a good time too! I do agree that dreams are the sub-concious's way to get in touch with the concious mind, trying to give it's opinion of events of the day or a situation. Unfortunatly, our sub-concious, has no voice. Hence the game of charades, with the pictorial mode. See? All very simple! Your screwed-up dreams aren't so out of the ordinary after all. I liked it for it's ambiguity, and the many different interpetations that could be given. Also for the sense of revenge and justice. Huh? Yeah, the horse riding a jockey. Sounds like the cartoon I saw recently of a bunch of deer standing around with coffee and rifles and another big buck with huge antlers, pointing at a map with a pointer. He's saying O.K. Pete, did you put out the six-pack down by the fence? Brian, we will drive them past you...LMAO I really enjoyed this write. See, Snake was right to goad you into posting it. Hig bugs and lotta love, ~ Gee ~ P.S. Did he get you to set a date yet? I really want some pictures of that new bike of his. LOL

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Gee

I noticed your comment just going to finish off a poem its the middle of the night here and I am trying to finish it before bed, well see how i go I get tired easy lately ... and this poem is crap, I cannot stand it but snake thought it was a poem so yeah I summited on his advice lol we have a date tentatively set for late June ... all going well ... so pictures right after the wedding ... lol he got a new car today so I think he can wait to get anymore new wheels hahaha god I hope he dont see that .. in his opinion you can never have too many wheels lol love you huni Jayne x x PMSL at that joke its a pearler when Snake wakes up weill share it with him lmao its a goodie eh ?? lol

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Jayne, well, I have been

Jayne, well, I have been wheel-less for over a year now. Strange, I do and I don't miss my Caddy. And Jayne, some of our best poems come like this one... fractured, dislocated and begging to be written down. It's the greatest show on earth...filled with gladiators, lions, snow-white tigers, yetti, etc.; when I write them I call them poems from my Hindu theme park, or bare-back riding. ;-) Love, Mum Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Mum

i have about 300 poems like this one lmao that I refuse to submit the other Jayne writes them and they are not fit for public scruntiny lol hahaha seriously some screwed up shit ... tell you what while I am away I will send a few you can submit them in your blog and well see if anyone thinks I am sane when I get back lmfao ... love you going to have one more shot at this ending if it dont come I am going to lay my ass down and try and sleep funny thing they took my licence lol I cant drive anything anymore ..:( except my quad i thrash it round the paddock but I dont know how long before I can reapply ... see in australia if you have three reported faints or blackouts in a two month period the docter by law has to report to the RTA-roads and traffic authority ...so I know what you mean I miss not driving but i dont miss being the local taxi for the kids lol ... love and hugs Jayne