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doorman
doorman
Dec 09, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Sangfroid

For all her joys he found her 

Down into the gulch,-  damned, 

uncared for, rotten apples' froth 

pulled up in a basket, a rope, a well, 

and a murmur tied up the corner of his 

mind,- he heard her laughing with imagined 

pride, joyous disregard for pathetic irritations and 

schemes of murder

He would show her 

After all, 

he loved her


— doorman, Dec 09, 2009

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Ink Dragon

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Espen,

loved the rotten apples, loved the poem. "and a murmur tied up the corner of his /mind", my personal highlight. And why the heck has no one bothered to comment? Yours, ~Nina
doorman

doorman

16 years 6 months ago

Nina

I've been through a lot lately,- no consistent quality time to spend on reading and writing. It will pass, like most things. It's good to see you again, brings me back to where I feel I should be. Pulled this one in a somber mood from a scary film. Stay cool, Yours, Espen.
Z

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

espen

hi there mmmm i left a comment anyway i do like your cryptic words rotten appels and all i hope your keeping well have you being back to your mountain retreat that did sound like heaven to me anyway glad to see you here again folk busy here of late chat soon ,,,,,,,ziggy
doorman

doorman

16 years 6 months ago

ziggy

Hey! Thanks for keeping a watchful eye. I've been away for too long, writing seems awkward, alien. Oh no, this has not been a mountain trip. Some other trip, though. I'll tell you about it another time. Good to see see you agian. Hope all's well. See you around, Espen.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 5 months ago

ESPEN!

The doorman has been too busy opening up for others I take it! Nice to have you back. Squeaky clean little poem this! Loved where it took us in the end. Despite all the "wrong stuff" - I'll love you anyway... Isn't that just the nature of the Beast? In closing, just one little grammatical hitch. Shouldn't it be 'Joyous disregard FOR'? Thanks again and do come back soon! Cheers Boni
doorman

doorman

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Bonita

Hi there, Boni. Long time since last time. Thanks for your input here, seems this one can go both ways. His intentions were meant a little darker than your interpretation. I'm not complaining, though. SIncere thanks for reading, and for the grammar check. Prepositions get past me sometimes. Opening doors, yes, well, funny it is when a doorman finds himself working as a bouncer... It's nice to be back. Yours, Espen. -and I've something for you which I've put on hold for too long.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Espen

Dark write this one ... there is an undertone in those last lines ... I sensed a foreboding as if you would show her and not in a nice way ... made me think Hannibal lector lol dont ask me I dont know why good to see you back love and hugs Jayne x x
doorman

doorman

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Jayne,I ripped this from

Hi Jayne, I ripped this from Hitchcock's 'Psycho'. I find Bate's love for his abusive mother quite chilling. Dark stuff aside, it's good see you again. Talk soon, Yours, Espen.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

his love for his mother was

his love for his mother was not just chilling it went to depths of depravity he was one sick puppy lol nice to see you back hun love and hugs Jayne x x lol thought you may get a giggle my partners last name is Bates yikes hide the knives hahaha
doorman

doorman

16 years 5 months ago

.. and be sure to install

.. and be sure to install transparent shower curtains.. - I went too far there, didn't I? Apologies, Espen.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

LMAO nooooooo I just laughed

LMAO nooooooo I just laughed cause we have glass shower doors see through !!! and even funnier hes got a knife collection god it just gets worse eh ? I just laughed so loud my son come in to make sure i was ok love and hugs Jayne P.S never apologise for having a sense of humour ;)
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Hahahaha LMAO no way huni

Hahahaha LMAO no way huni ... I dont like hanging dead things around my house ... seriously would freak me out ... thanks for the laughs today I am still chuckling love and hugs Jayne x x