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Heed thy warning lest ye die

"Inhale
and when it's time you exhale
have ready your justification
because with this blade in my hand
I can perforate your throat
just as fast as look at you.
And without prying eyes to view
I will be above reprimand
free of consequence
and have a full sense of absolution.
I own these hills
and my flesh be damned
if I let you... or anyone else
take them from me.
Grasping at them with their greasy hands
my flesh be damned
if I don't... fight
for what i believe is rightfully mine.
I have felt the wrath of man
I have felt the wrath of all fury
I have felt the fires of damnation
and I shall spit in the face
of any man who seeks
or attempts to destroy
what legacy I have left
or intend to construct.
so avert your gaze slowly
and allow your path to follow
heed thy warning, lest ye die
I'll deliver you to your maker
choking violently
on your own blood and bile."




— Bosscombat, Dec 08, 2009

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Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Warning...

I'm not sure I want to know what pissed you off this badly. Suffice to say, you feel transgressed upon. I think I will just quietly walk the other way. Nice work by the way. ~ Gee
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 6 months ago

Hey Boss

Good stuff man, good stuff. Couple of suggestions 1 "perforate" sounds a bit contrived, a bit dispassionate 2 "of any man who seeks or attempts to destroy what legacy I have left" - I stumbled here, it just seemed kind of halting and stuttery...maybe the second line needs changing? OK I'm done....slowly backing away...averting eyes... Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Matty

I have to agree with our friend jim with this one ... that last bit I got hooked up on it as well ... “of any man who seeks or thinks to destroy what legacy I have left” ?? just a suggestion but I loved it and I will juggle your other star hey you gotta work for this one lmao ... ;) wicked bitch I am ... lol sorry I missed this one I was down for the count and resting just found it ,you gotta start texting me and letting me know when you post I aint always around lol love you brother Jayne x x x
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

I get it.

And think the problem lies not so much in the lines of any man who seeks or attempts to destroy what legacy I have left although I like Jaynes suggestion, but in the following line or intend to construct. Don't like either intend or construct, lacks the viscera of the rest. A great write. Why the inverted commas? Now to piss you off. Ownership is theft. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
JW

Jimmi Dylan Whitlam

16 years 5 months ago

My man matty

This is brilliant mate, never did i think anything so intense, passionate and distrubing, could be written so beautifully. Re donk 10.