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Reality is rested and rare

Reality is rested and rare,,

Dreams and hopes wrapped up in paper towel,
what next for the labouring knight
Hands all crusted calloused hard, and tired,
has he always been keen for this fight

Started with hopes higher than scrapers,
left home their failures, weighed heavy in tact
Journeying further claiming each triumph quietly,
friends loud not constrained with fact

Shall each small honour be shirked left aside,
with the march stalling failing at best
Not one man could say turn about soon,
each to much sunk in this tiresome quest

The end could be left on a door step,
principals could all just spin, cut and run
Not known for their gallant appraisals,
not many dream deeply not one

What is given for bravery is not sacred,
metal bashed beaten, awkwardly hanging
Paraded in courtyards in cluttered towns
mayoral music and big drums all banging

— Roscoe Lane, Dec 06, 2009

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Region, Country: Scotland, Ayrshire land of Burns.., GBR

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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 5 months ago

Hey Roscoe

Ok so some great imagery here, the knight, the courtyards. Live poems with these sort of images, draws me in every time. My only thing was capitalization and punctuation. Use capitals as you always would- beginning of sentences, names, etc. And use punctuation as you normally would, unless the poem style states otherwise. Just reads smoother and is less rant- like, you know what I mean? That and maybe split it up into stanzas. Peace~~~~
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks

Many, many thanks Morgana, i have applied a litte change or two. Again i say thanks for your advice, it really does help. love Roscoe..
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 5 months ago

The changes did that poem

The changes did that poem good, it reads quite smoother now and more sentence like while still being a poem. Nice job! Peace~~~~