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Her aroma wafts
onto his nose

And it smells
of the
sweetest perfume

He caresses her
soft silky skin
as he holds her
in his arms

And as he
holds her hand
in his
while walking
down the street

Tasting her soft
sweet lips
just drives him crazy
with love

When she blinks
her eyelashes flutter
as if they are the wings
of a cherub

He just wants to
go to the top of
the highest mountain
and proclaim
my love for her

Just not wanting her
to go and wanting
to never let go

— Benjamin1987, Dec 04, 2009

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Boston, Massachusetts, USA

Favorite Poets: The Beat Generation

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

So far so good. Now find

So far so good. Now find some unique, *Benjamin-only* expressions. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

So far so good. Now add

So far so good. Now add some more unique, *Benjamin-only* expressions. ~A off of her.. is rather clumsy. how about her aroma wafts onto his nose? "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

Benjamin1987

16 years 6 months ago

Thank You

Thank you very much A. That comment was very insightful and I can see how "off of her" is clumsy. Your suggestion actually works even better.