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Dalton
Dec 03, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Lady Poem:

Lady Poem
A kingdom of air
Sand in the breeze
A lyric so fair
She looms in my mind
And butters my soul
She is nothing
I am less
We the twin
Made whole...

I am told that my enemy
Is so different from me
He is measured by sacrifice
And I by deceit
His women are rare
Though mine beyond compare
Yet he bleeds as men bleed
And his pain I share...

(23 March 09)






— Dalton, Dec 03, 2009

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Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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amalzamani

16 years 6 months ago

2 poems?

I find difficulty connecting the first stanza to the second...but both are excellent. Your poetry voice seems old! as if I'm reading for someone who lived hundreds of years ago yet you use today's words! this is truly great!
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Dalton

I agree with Anna ... you write as if from times of old ... and I agree they are two poems but can see a bare connnection ... I will be back for a another read beautifully done kind regards love Jayne x x