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Daylight

I wonder how many people will notice
the work of the cleaning lady,
not just the things she does with dust
but the bouquet of tiny wild flowers
she has set in a bamboo vase.

We all come to this mountain factory
in our impressive vehicles,
but rain or shine she climbs the hill
on an old bike, stopping to push it up
the steep incline and then sailing down
the descent.

She walks among the desks,
silently sweeping away the years
and the hierarchies of dirt
as if waiting for an artist
to paint something more beautiful
on the canvas of our minds.

It is her job to keep things
at base level,
to erase and not create,
to orchestrate her cleaning products and tools
into a symphony of silence,
as if wielding a magic wand
that removes the players and the audience
from the stage.

Into these empty spaces we tred,
these logical, functional units
of time that hold microchips of
sublime knowledge in
robotic hands.

There is no doubting the power of the streets,
nor the insistence of neon
at twilight,
riding back through the city,
seeing the faces of clones
on posters in shop windows,
hiding scared in the avenues,
trying to be invisible
to those who wield intellect
like a knife,
or joyful,
weld the disintegrating
bones of warehouses
into department stores.

I think she sees it too,
through the cake of her makeup,
for she navigates a featureless world
of hours written off to duty,
of lifetimes lived
at arms length,
of rainbows made invisible
by the prism of car windows.

And so is it any wonder
that she tries to nourish the illusion
of the forest,
of things seen from afar,
untouchable,
memories that seep from the earth,
that rise diluted from her rice fields,
that she carries with her,
offering me, occasionally,
bright symbols of fruit,
blood red oranges
and wine red grapes,
so that I might see that she knows
the old ways of kindness.

— Heading South, Dec 02, 2009

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bjp

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Heading South,

What a wonder of a poem! This is why I read - in hopes of stumbling against such a wonder. I am loath to tamper here. However, consider removing "both" from the second last line, fourth stanza. Also consider removing "down" from the second last line, second stanza. Excellent poem - in case I hadn't made my point. Brian
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 6 months ago

Dear bjp

Thank you so much for your kind words and advice. I find it very hard to be objective about my own work so to hear that you actually liked reading this poem is incredibly encouraging. I removed "both" from the second last line, fourth stanza as you advised. It wasn't in my original draft and I only added it later as an afterthought so it's uncanny that you should suggest removing it! Thanks again and kind regards, Daniel
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odd molly

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Heading South.Your poem

Dear Heading South. Your poem made tears it is the best I ve read in a very long time and my heart did a happy somersault. How beautifully you describe the small and sometimes invisible but still the most important in life. Humility and love the simple gestures that matter most in the end. I bow deeply and I thank you for reminding me. (I also love the title of your poem. Daylight ) thank You and thank You. love. o molly
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Odd Molly

You have such a wonderful way with words! Thank you for your kind and heart warming comments! Kind regards, Daniel
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Bravo .. thanks to Brian I

Bravo .. thanks to Brian I found this one ... and its a gem I feel honoured to read ... kind regards love Jayne
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Seren

Thank you so much, I loved your collage of light poem, especially the line "dreamweaving through Southern lights"... all the best, Daniel
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Daniel

Thank you so much for your compliment ... but I have to say this poems just brilliant ... I look forward to reading your next I am waiting lol tap tap tap (insert foot tapping) love Jayne x x
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 6 months ago

Heading South...

Thank you for posting this real poem, moving and genuine... a great combination! Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

This is the third time I

This is the third time I will attempt to write a response. The energy is different than that of the first two. Now, I can only say your heart is heading in the right direction. Love. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 6 months ago

Dear all

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. It is most appreciated! It's getting pretty late here in Japan so I'll check back tomorrow with a fresh mind! Goodnight, Daniel
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 6 months ago

Wow

Well written and congrats on spotlight!!!!!!!! Having been a cleaning lady before, the first few lines of this caught my eye and then to read more was like being taken on this beautiful journey that was more than the simplicity of the cleaning lady- to me it spoke of the world in general, how people seem to be clones and we all work for something visible, touchable, and in the closing stanzas you describe how she strives for the untouchable. Very beautiful, the best I have read in a while. I also related to the solitude of the poem's tone, again being a cleaning lady before...it's almost a peaceful solitude where you don't think much, don't dwell on troubles,you just do your job and do it in a bubble of solitude. You captured her character most gorgeously. That solitude is one thing I do miss from my old job....college right now is chaos but I love that too! Hope to see more from you! Peace n love Katie