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Absolutely adored this poem Nina... kudos, bow and hi 5's, every line is praise-worthy. ...scattering the We to the winds... indeed. Love, Anna p.s. I would use shined rather than shone & lingers or lives rather than resides.

Dear Nina, Episode three:- This story is well said, and I LOVE some of the instances of comparison such as "your burrow of pretenses"..pretences? "My hazel eyes are prisms", oh and many more. There's just a tiny feeling of me wishing for a little more poetry in it, but then it is a kind of prose-like verse, but I would like it to rock me more. Oh I hope I don't worry you by saying this? I don't mean to do that dear Nina. Great idea and it will be extra fun to see them next to next and see how they flow the one into the other. I'll wait to star this until I do see them all together!! Love to you Nina from An of Norway.

Superlative my friend! Especially the closing line: "Scattering the we to the winds"... Good to see you up and running again, as I receed into the shadows with work for now! ;) Tschuess Boni

but, this one is good too. 'The map is useless I ball it up and throw it away scattering the We to the winds' I like this ending to the whole thing; and I like the capitol W. Very nice, Nina. You mentioned you might read it aloud; that would be fun. I would like to hear you read it. Yours, Deelilah

I've really enjoyed reading some of the work on this site and keep saying ''i love it'' in my comments, so im going to try and be imaganitive in commenting this. I think that i really apprieciate this poem, because it speaks to me. I really enjoyed the style and the wording was great. |I related to the subject well, i look forward to reading the first parts. I liked what you did with my poem chasing rainbows. you got it exactly and i see after ready this why you did. thanks for providing a soulful and visual read. i like the mix of poetic words and modern reality. vix

but a bit concerned about the bewilderingly mixed metaphors. The huge extended metaphor of geography should allow for some subset metaphors but they include cake, icecream, magic paraphernalia, anatomy, seasons, astrology, physics. Goodness gracious me, I'm exhausted. Against all reason it does work though, and yes it should all be posted as one poem and yes would love to hear it spoken, Cheers, Jess, whose nature is irrepressible

I always wanted to write a poem for women who have had it with their weak , selfish partners. If I read it correctly, the guy is cross-eyed and smokes dope, so she trashes his nintendo ? Seriously, Nina, I really liked this, it rings true , well done. Ian

A road map to misery thrown out..the we perhaps to Us?

..or and scatter the *we of us* to the winds. (thus nodding to the perception that nothing is ever finished, because it isn't, else the poem would not have been written.) Love. ~A p.s. shone in a poem, for me just doesn't cut it. *Shined* shines.. Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.