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Of a smile or cry

Of a smile or cry

The first sounds
You make , in your life
Is  the  breath  ?
Of a smile or cry .
These are  the first notes
In your song
You will write

The day you where born
Is the day , to decide
To write a song

.With smiles or cry’s
Behold !
This beginning ,  your story of
Strength !
And pride 

You will write this song
For a validation
To become documentation 
For  that  breath
Of a smile or  a cry 
— press, Dec 01, 2009

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poewriter58

16 years 5 months ago

Press

What I see is a beautiful idea here but it isn't quite coming across How about something like The first breath you breathe Is a smile or a cry the day you (are) were is past tense Is the day you decide (this is present tense) So you can say The day you are bornis the time to decide or the day you were born was the time to decide what about you will write the lyrics for validation etc this eliminates the over use of the word song Chrys