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Ink Dragon
Nov 28, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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I’m in the process of submitting poems to magazines and therefore deleting them. They may be up again later.

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

The drop returns to the

The drop returns to the ocean. The edge moves. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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Ink Dragon

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Anna,

I see you have given this one 4 stars - well, I did have a feeling it wasn't as strong as the first one, so point taken. Can you see where its weakness lies? I have been trying and trying to find an angle on improvement, but failed to find it. A little nudge in the right direction would be more than welcome. Yours, ~Nina
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

Pare down, darling… say

Pare down, darling... say only what you mean to say. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Oh these are fine, will we

Oh these are fine, will we get a III or have you done, I think we shall get a three, I hope so as they are so rich in detail and unusual thought, so sensuous and terrible, the tragicomic syndrome well described Nina. I wait star wise, Love from Ann.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 5 months ago

Yes, dearest Ann,

you will get a III. It's coming up now. Thank you for following this little series. Tragicomic syndrome, I love that. Yours, ~Nina