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The Beast Of Sutters' Fen

Swirling thick about my door,
a Hellish fog can not obscure
the path that winds its way to Sutters' Fen

Dimly lit by glowing moss
that hangs from trees which reach across
a gulf of time that severs now from when

A swollen moon begins to rise
and gives pale light to Godless skies,
my plodding feet grow damp as I go deep

The evil that has lingered here
so many years,  still nurtures fear
within the hearts of those who seldom sleep

A mournful howling that began
from throat of neither Beast nor Man
yet clearly sharing attributes of each,

grows in volume,  fills the air
with snarls of terror and despair
that echo far beyond where they should reach

My fear gives way to stark surprise
as I begin to realize
these fiendish sounds are coming forth from me!

My clothing starts to shred and tear,
I snarl as clumps of mangy hair
spring forth from every inch of skin set free

My limbs grow twisted as the trees
which hide me like some foul disease
from the prying eyes of mortal men

and so it is I come to find
a painful truth within my mnd,
I am the Beast that lurks in Sutters' Fen!

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Nov 30, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

hi Lonnie

I cannot begin to tell you how very much I enjoyed this poem. It is almost hypnotizing. I loved the way you used rhyme, and the storytelling style is mesmerizing! I love it! Always, Cat
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, dear Lady!

This was a fun one to write! Rhyme and Meter is my thing, as you well know, even though it's frowned on by most other poets! I just can't help myself! Anyways, I'm very glad you liked it so much!
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thanks, John!

Got to compete with you, 'ya know! It's always nice to hear praise from a verse-writer such as yourself!
Tam the Chanter

Tam the Chanter

16 years 6 months ago

You old dawg, you

Rhyme and metre also appeal to me,Lonnie. I can't tell you how much I liked this poem. "a gulf of time that severs now from THEN maybe-- maybe not. Loved it, my boy, well done Kindest Regards Ian T
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thanks so much, Ian!

Kind words from someone as talented as you is high praise indeed! Glad you liked this little effort of mine!
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lonnie

rhyme and Meter are my comfort zones and where I am happiest writing ... its my pillow if you may , you have mastered rhythm and I bow to the beastie from sutters fen' love and hugs to you both Jayne x x x
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you much, jayne!

It's always nice to meet another fan of Disciplined Poetry! Glad you enjoyed this and I thank you once again for your kind words!
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Lunegirl

16 years 6 months ago

ooooooh i really liked this!

ooooooh i really liked this! its very captivating and lures you into the story with imagery through descriptive writing. The lanuage gave me good visuals and the rythem and pace were spot on. Constucted really well, the only constructive critism would be that it felt a little like the chioce of word ''when'' at the bottom of verse two was used because it rhymes with the word fen, it maybe threw the poem out of sinc very slightly and only in that instant. Just because after verse two i was expecting the poem to take me into times of past because of how it ended, but it didn't it stayed in the present. its a very small thing to pick up upon and i don't know what word or way i would have changed that. I love your style of writing and look forward to reading more ; )
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 6 months ago

Lonnie

Most excellent, wish I could rhyme like this. Guess I'll have to howl instead. Heehee... Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 6 months ago

rhythm and rhime given

rhythm and rhime given chance, the thought has been spun out metticulously. shan