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Splinterage

There's a certain discrepancy
found in exchanging verbage

Convoluted is how the splinters of language
in all of it's splendor
can describe what someone is feeling

T.V. glib and glide does no one understand?
chapped will be your hand,

and you will bleed on the 'morrow'
your secrets safe with me

If the son is eventually
father to the man
do our expectations lessen for the man?

I think not.

Would you ever expect more for the man?
...so that his light could shine?

I think not.

For all that I've learned,
non-sense adorns expectations;
so, does anyone have that right?

I think not.

For I have seen the  tears of failure
I have witnessed beads falling down the forehead of iniquity;

So wouldn't it be better,
after laughing in the face of destiny
for the father to remain the man to the son?

I think not.
— docmaverick, Nov 28, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

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Antoinette Mar…

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Doc.....

Do you think I have encountered a masterpiece in the making?? I think so...This is truly awesome...and may I say I know so....
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bjp

16 years 6 months ago

Dear docmaverick,

This is poem, with its Tolkien-esque logic circles, continues the exhalation of breaths of fresh air. So; you are writing up a storm of breaths. I take it that you are enjoying the new freedoms of style. Continuing congradulations. Brian
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Ink Dragon

16 years 6 months ago

Doc,

thumbs up for this poem. There’s a certain discrepancy found in exchanging verbage Convoluted is how the splinters of language in all of it’s splendor can describe what someone is feeling loved these lines (though it's should better be its). "non-sense adorns expectations" is another fav line for me, and I also think the repetitions work well. Yours, ~Nina P.S. l.12 lessen?
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 6 months ago

Nina....

...it has been repaired. Thank-you, my dear. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Doc

Wow its like you have been asleep and now all of a sudden your awake and having a big long stretch ... and its wonderful to behold brilliant write my favourite lines are the same as Ninas and that third stanza I roared laughing was I meant to lol ... did it mean what I am thinking it meant? ... lol loved it dear man love and hugs Jayne x x
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 6 months ago

Jayne....

...all I can say is, "yes"! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

I didn’t understand a word

I didn't understand a word you said. Is that what you meant by *I think not*. ;-) You go, Doc and don't stop for anything but to smell the flowers. Like a bull in a china shop. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 6 months ago

Yours, Kailashana....

...was the comment I was waiting for. My last few poems were getting rave reviews, and they were merely scattered phrases from completely different conversations, "sewn" together in a poetic style, (Whatever that means in freeform.). Your comment brought such a hearty laugh, that it was sarcasm that slid down my cheeks ! Thank-you for that, ~A. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.