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Why Buddha is Weeping?

Why Buddha is weeping?

Buddha is weeping,Buddha is weeping
He is continuously weeping
I n my morning dream  He is weeping
to say some thing to this world
I tried to ask the reason for His weeping
I couldn't near Him and I couldn't ask Him
As a Sinner and As a corrupted soul
I couldn't  ask Him anything
My voice echoed in all Peaks of Mountains
But He is not concerned with that voice
He wanted to say some thing among His weep
as a whisper in a slow and in a thin voice
He wanted to say some thing
I heard and tried to heard
I couldn't hear His message
as a sinner and a unkind soul
I couldn't Hear His message
The vision vanished as a smoke
Still my mind is asking me 
Why Buddha is weeping and  what He wanted to say ?
Repeatedly my mind is asking me  this
  To Know ,May The Noble help me ?




— SAKTHEEE2007, Nov 28, 2009

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Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Buddha Weeps...

Your title is good, it caught my eye. Your language use is fair, but I had a little trouble with:He wanted to say something [among] his weeping. Try using; He wanted to say something with his weeping. Also: I heard and tried to heard. How about saying: I heard his voice, but couldn't hear, his message. And: Why is Buddha weeping and what did he want to say? My thoughts repeat, and I want to know, " What noble being can help me?" Your message is consistent, and the logic carries through. Good work just needs a few tweaks. ~ Gee