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A Celestial Endeavour (Apollo 13)

We walk down the gantry, bid farewell to all
All family and loved ones our heads held tall
On Apollo we board our suits hot and dry
To hurtle ever upward into vast distant sky

Technology to thrust and break from Earths grasp
Man bound by gravity, our beliefs now surpassed
Horiontal and poised the sequencial count ends
Great blasts of Saturn power to space it does send

Limitations of physics,  our bodies it does test
Once floating in space we earned our own rest
Fifty five hours in, a blast to our dreams
Our survival now the mission, that landing unseen
 We draw breath with reserve to our companions in space
Knowing air time is limited and a crucial new race
Communication is key our only lifeline
Oh Mission Control please give us a sign

To those tech men we look for the answers we need
They now forge a plan to save with the feed
We now must make use of all thats around
Remake those air scrubbers with tape they are bound

To the Mother of invention we all will now pray
Our Angel of necessity please save them this day
Our family and friends at Mission Control
They too all but breathless, to God they consol

At last we have hope after those suspended hours
A solution, a chance and enough trust to empower
To Earth now they fall, the comms have gone black
We hear our brave crew, our Moon men are back

Now let it be heard of those brave men and true
A team effort from all like no others could do

A Celestial Endeavour......indeed!

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Something about the rhythm

Something about the rhythm even as blank verse worries me in this poem, and here and there the content is unclear in its message, poetry can be vague and not explicit, yes, but it has a rhythm either in its repetition of sounds, not necessarily word endings, that gives it wings and if any subject needed wings then it is this where little animal man tries to fly in space to another planet, mind boggling and unbelievable, yet they did it and wow what a feat of technological creativity and verve. That's what I think Stuart, take it or leave it; its a terrific subject. Love from Ann of Norway. Great blasts of Saturn power to space it does send...............it does send ! our bodies it does test.........to test Knowing air time is limited and a crucial new race.................can't quite understand this line. To those tech men we look for the answers we need...........rhythm a little rocky here?
 They now forge a plan to save with the feed.......................not clear?

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Stuart Reiss

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Ann,This poem is a

Hi Ann, This poem is a commentary of events and has no real connection with my other pieces. Its body a tale in fact of some amazing events which unfolded. I am comfortable with its idiosyncrises as in life dont we know that nothing is perfect. Knowing air time is limited and a crucial new race……………..can’t quite understand this line. (This is the challenge to save oxygen as the blast destroyed part of the air filtering system - hence the new race to either recreate a repaired system and stay alive) Thanks very much Ann for you comments Best regards Stu
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Stuart

I totally get this I am a space nut lol I brought a telescope yesterday so I am going to peruse my sky tonight lol I am so in love with the sky I decided to look a little closer .... so good to see you back round again have missed your comments and your energy love and hugs Jayne BTW forgot to mention I have a doco with Tom Hanks as the lead presenter about the space race in the sixties goes for about 10 hrs I think ... lol haha
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Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

Hey Jayne glad you liked it.

Hey Jayne glad you liked it. Was kinda like a by stander doing poem commentary on this one lol... Look to the stars for our origin is there best regards Stu
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lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Hey Stu

Enjoyed the read and it was very good but I felt it was not you. Having said that, it is written well and interesting. Well done. Lyz. XX
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Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

Very well observed Liz, I

Very well observed Liz, I didnt feel it was me after I wrote it so I sat back and realised that I wasnt part of the crew on this occasion lol...but you are right, its not like anyting else I've written. I purposely wrote this one for a friend who helped with the communications of the original mission to the moon. He wanted to start a poetry award around the mission for kids so I said I would write a piece to get the kids thinking.. Thanks heaps Liz