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November

A jasmine moon hangs like a hammock over Nishio.
Orion, polaris, antares; opaque diodes failing
to burn through this abandoned night.

From all these flyovers in all these cars, they whisper
of autonomous zones discovered in the municipal grounds
by the river.

History focused into a couple of naked bodies
striving for equilibrium
in the shadow of a glacier...
— Heading South, Nov 27, 2009

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

the moon is dressed in

the moon is dressed in silk, bound feet and shy eyes, lonely samurai slices her in half, never to have her whole, chrysanthemums tumble from the sky turn the river crimson, pond to gold, his heart iced in white... ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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Ink Dragon

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Heading South,

I very much enjoyed your wintry poem and bid you a belated welcome to the site. Your "jasmine moon" drew me in, and I am absolutely stunned by your powerful poetic voice. I will definitely read more of your poems when time allows. Regards, Ink Dragon
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Ink Dragon

Thank you so much for your kind comments. I really liked your poem entitled "Our Balcony" and have nominated it for the spotlight. All the best! Heading South
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odd molly

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Heading South. Your

Dear Heading South. Your poem brought forth a beautiful memory I have in my heart. I visited Japan some year ago and one evening I took a long walk in a little town ( do not remember its name ) and I could hear this song or chant from everywhere and the fulllmoon gave light to the street and the trees and the little lovely houses and gardens. The time was january and the chant came from a monk sitting in a little temple..His robe as gold and his voice like the sound of a waterfall. I think it is the most beautiful picture I have ever wandered in. Your winter poem is so beautifully written and now I am looking forward to read the rest of the poems that you have posted. Thank You. Love. o molly
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 6 months ago

Hello again

After reading your marvelous spotlight poem, I had to come check out your other writes between laundry loads...this was almost as good as that one!!!! The jasmine moon like really hit me. You have a stunning way of weaving words into these masterpieces. Keep it up! Peace n love Katie