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I Wish You Were My Girlfriend

I wish you were my girlfriend but I'm too afraid to ask
I wish you would go out with me but you just have too much class

If I did ever get the courage to talk to you I would be very nervous
I would stutter and stumble my way through a sentence
Not being able to look you in the eye
I would probably just mumble "Hello" to you
Because I am very shy

I wish you were my girlfriend but you have too much charm and beauty
I could never get someone like you for you are more than just a cutey
You have an aura about you which is too much for me to bear
So I don't talk to you I just stand and stare

I wish you were my girlfriend I wish that could be true
I would love to brag to all my friends that I had pulled someone like you
I would be on the biggest high of all and would never want to come down
I would not stop smiling all day long
Furthermore I could never frown

I wish you were my girlfriend for that would make my life
The only way it could be bettered if you became my wife
Then I could date you every day and make you feel special for that would be my task
I wish you were my girlfriend but I'm too afraid to ask

— michael, Nov 26, 2009

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Millage

16 years 6 months ago

I can relate

to what you are saying here Michael. There are some very nice lines in this one, but also some that could be looked at. Not sure about the phrase 'pulled' (in my opinion it's a bit obvious)and maybe look at the rhyming of beauty and cutey (but, I apologise if 'cutey' has a special meaning to you). In the main, I like the theme and have myself, written pieces down this line. Much love Millage x
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michael

16 years 6 months ago

Thanx

Thanx 4 the comment. I've only been writing a short time and I don't claim to be very good. I couldn't think of anything to rhyme with beauty that would fit in with what I was saying. RE: Pulled. Obvious is what I'm about, I'm all about the obvious.