The Temptress

She silently seduces
In all her splendor
With beauty she produces
From her frame so slender

Charming to the eye
Emitting aromas sweet
Sounding a lullaby
Of enchanting treat

Tempted, he advances
Tranced in her allure
Taking his chances
On lust for a cure

Managing only a touch
Upon her bloom
He's captured in her clutch
Encased in a tomb

Now she destroys him
Piece by piece
With torture so grim
A slow decease

— Poetree, Nov 25, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

The Temptress

You just keep getting better and better! I like the title... it has a promise of despicable things to come ;) and it delivers. The theme is definitely right up my alley. my favorite lines are: Managing only a touch Upon her bloom He’s captured in her clutch Encased in a tomb Now she destroys him Piece by piece With torture so grim A slow decease Always, Cat

Poetree

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you

Thank you my lovely!!! I'm so glad you like it and I am really grateful that you think my poetry is getting better! Joel x

Dustyverse

16 years 3 months ago

I LIKE THIS TOO...

I STAND IN AWE OF ANY POET WHO CAN PAINT SUCH A PICTURE WITH JUST A FEW WORDS!! I NEVER COULD FIGURE OUT HOW TO DO IT! EVEN MY SHORTER POEMS SOMETIMES SEEM TO GO ON AND ON AND ONE AND...WELL YOU GET IT...HAHAHA!! MAYBE IT'S A GENETIC THING..YANKEE? WRATCHETJAW...LOL!! BUT MY HATS OFF TO U FOR DOING IT SO WELL!! DUSTY

Poetree

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you

Thankyou, Your comments are really kind and I really appreciate it!! I am so much better with writing shorter poems, sometimes I find it difficult to write a long poem to tell a story, which is why I love your poem "The Loser" because it tells a great story and it doesn't get boring at all, I was gripped and excited to read more. When I write a longer poem, to me, it seems to get a little boring because I "waffle" too much!!! Maybe I should stick to Haiku!!Lol! Once again, Thank you, Joel x