themoonman

Nov 23, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Releasing the Human

Are we over-expressive
share... too openly

and why

who really cares
it's simply what is done

for you, me, the us and them
we display monumental bright-colored whens
and blacken in the presence of background woes

all while...
picking your nose to the grindstone's relief
kicking the peddler's thumping beliefs
a flicker of silence, pinching the waste
gathered to ground, puddling paste
oncoming protrusions and those curdled illusions
the grand tent of time and its circus confusion
fishing for feelings, netting the prize
letting it go and wondering why
wins, sins and giving-up grins
losing our way and begin-agains

the overly informative shits on the stage
we are dipped in the honey of human pain

— themoonman, Nov 23, 2009

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Critiques

bjp

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Richard,

Imaginative, insightful, complex, emotive, viceral, challenging, assertive and considerate. This is way, way beyond. Congradualations! Brian

themoonman

16 years 6 months ago

Brian...

somebody catch me my chair is tipping from the swooning much love to ya both Richard

Bonitaj

16 years 6 months ago

Richard!

You've been away too long - or did I miss something! You always come back with a punch that floors me! THere are some marvellous lines here with subtle innuendo that says it all: "oncoming protrusions and those curdled illusions the grand tent of time and its circus confusion" Encore Ring Master!! Cheers Boni ps. Just one grammatical, rhetorical question - should it not be "all THE while"?

themoonman

16 years 6 months ago

Boni...

thank you for reading and liking that line, it was actually a last minute line and I liked it too all the while... now you've got me thinking, perhaps! thanks again and a big thank you for making me look at my word choices. Richard

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Have to come back later...

To do this one justice. Just too tired right now.

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Hi Gee...

thanks for reading!

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Coming back later...

I just was reminded about this one when you sent me the comment about thanks for reading. So I nipped over and looked at it again. I was just as impressed as the first time! You have a way of putting so much information into your work. This one is pretty impressive, in it's speed and flow. I wonder if you were once a auctioneer? LOL ~ Gee

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Annie...

I appreciate you reading and commenting... hope you are having a good day!

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Hi

What an insightful man you are. Always words that get the old gray matter jiggling. This is just one more of your many great writes. I too miss your poems. Love Lyz. XX

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Lyz...

As you can see, I'm very late in responses... but I do love the thought of jiggling your gray matter a bit and had to say it. Richard

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Hello again

You can jiggle my grey matter any day. And as for your tardiness, I will take the + away from your A. Lol. Kidding. Well done. Love lyz. XX

W.C.Wampler

16 years 6 months ago

...human...poem...comment

Moon., I really like the way you set the stage, then kicked it into gear and ran with a tight quasi rhyme sceme. All good chunks of reality in abstract too. Nicely done, of course. wcw

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

W.C.W....

always a pleasure to see you sir, thank you for mentioning the set up, didn't know if it would work or not. Richard

Damo

16 years 5 months ago

The whole thing is great but

The whole thing is great but particularly love that last line - 'we are dipped in the honey of human pain'. Love the language too - palatable, playful and provocative.

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Damo...

Thank you for reading and commenting. This is one of those that I edited very little... just sorta fell out one morning.

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Richard

Hold your chair ... your a wonderful poet dear man I am sorry I missed this one till now thanks for updating it love and hugs Jayne x x

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne...

thank you for your upright nature... I hope all is going well with you. Richard

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Sometimes I am exceedingly

Sometimes I am exceedingly grateful for having missed some poetry. This is one such day. Glad I came upon it Richard. Truth, like shit, happens, and we're left to ponder its elusive nature. Well done, Richard. You always smell so good. Must be that mixture of male, truth and love. ~A

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Anna...

I'm glad you are here. Truth is indeed an elusive beast, sometimes we let it go and feel relief, other times it is a frail awakening... thank you Anna, I needed your uplifting words more than you could know.

loved

16 years 3 months ago

i learnt it

Hello sir I’ve now learnt how to Access your profile, I missed reading you All this long while, Now I gladly smile And shall do Read poems Written by you. The stars are spread wide, I can't my desires hide, But when I miss your comment, It brings tears into my eye Why can't I use Metaphors for cry.