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No tears

 

We died quietly

 

Without questions nor regrets   

 

And the day felt incomplete somehow

 

But I didn’t cry

 

We traded our love

 

For a peculiar hollowness

 

Only felt when there was time to get nostalgic

 

Or when the clock brought the darkness

 

and still I couldn’t cry

 

You blamed it on my bipolar

 

Or was it my selfishness

 

Or the ever-present wall

 

My lack of faith in love you said

 

And now I need to remember who I was

 

Before your words changed me

 

So I took another breath

 

that gave birth to another day

 

In which I was too scared to die

 

and too tired to live.

 

So I carried on

 

Robotic

 

Trying not to feel

 

Until I became exactly what you said I was

 

Cold, bitter, unapproachable

 

And still unable to cry

 


— Mrs Dalloway, Nov 23, 2009

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MD

Mrs Dalloway

16 years 6 months ago

Thanks so much for the

Thanks so much for the comment. Hope to hear from you soon!
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mugsy

16 years 6 months ago

No Tears

"I think this is good. It flows well and tells a story, although a sad one, but hey, life at times is sad and within that there is reality.---Good job mrs D."-------
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Mrs Dalloway

your poem is wonderful ... you touch on so many aspects of the disintergration of a relationship ... and how sometimes we become people through circumstance and not our own will ... sometimes being pushed to be someone we are not ... brilliant write ... love and hugs Jayne x x
MD

Mrs Dalloway

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you for the thoughts.

Thank you for the thoughts. I've had a lot of experience in the area of disintegration of a relationships and i've heard people say that you should write about what you know! Ha! Thanks Jayne...
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 6 months ago

Mrs Dalloway...

You are very good, it will be fun reading your writes... this one has some tense problems that are easily edited Only felt when there is (was) Only felt would be past tense and "is" is present. when the clock brings (brought), for the same reason then in two lines, another, maybe one could be changed, or not, sometimes I'm at a loss as to what to offer, because it may not be as I would write it, but it surely doesn't mean it's wrong... as your poem is very effective as it is... yes, I will enjoy reading you! Richard
MD

Mrs Dalloway

16 years 6 months ago

Richard, so good to hear

Richard, so good to hear from you. Made the changes as you suggested. Thanks for bringing it under my attention. Mrs Dalloway
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Stander

16 years 6 months ago

Sorry

I understand what you are saying, but i dont think this poem flows very well. It jumps around too much for my liking. Sorry ;)