Death warmed up

The Reaper looks ever so poorlyThe Reaper looks ever so grimBut then it is hardly surprisingHe really is terribly thin With his job there’s no time for dinnerHe looks like he’s dead on his feetHe really is ever so busyAnd never gets much time to eat It’s about time he had an assistantSome help is what’s needed, and quickIf he doesn’t start looking after himselfHe’s going to end up quite sick So if his employers are listeningAnd they don’t want to get into troubleMake sure that he takes all his mealtimes and breaksBut do it tout suite, at the double

— shazbat, Nov 22, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Norfolk, UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Kipling, T.S Eliot, Hilaire Belloc, Ogden Nash, Spike Milligan and many more.

Critiques

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

I dig your work!

Have you read any of Terry Pratchett's Diskworld novels? A marvellous anthropomophism of death. I also suspect that many of your readers get a chuckle but don't appreciate the skill of your wordcrafting. My only crit is to remove the comma from If he doesn’t start, looking after himself Bye the way, I'm up for the job, but can I use a machette instead of a scythe? I know it lacks elegance, but hey, we all have peculiar penchants. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

shazbat

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you young man, I’ve

Thank you young man, I've got to admit that that particular comma must have slipped in when i wasn't looking, either that or it was inserted by some fiendish saboteur, you will be pleased to know that the little blighter has now been removed. I do believe that the other side are always on the lookout for suitable recruits, sadly machettes are frowned upon as they do not project the right image, but should you be lucky enough to secure a position you can be damned sure its a job for life. Thanks for the comment Jess John

Ink Dragon

16 years 5 months ago

Hi John,

I see I've missed out on many a laugh and would like to second Jess: Wordcraft is the term here, yes. Particularly enjoyed the image of Death ending up quite sick :) Funnily enough, this poem also reminded me of the Discworld series. There is one novel, titled "Mort", where Death takes up an apprentice. Do read it if you get the chance, I think you'll love it. One minor point of crit on the French: Unless I am mistaken, it should be "tout de suite". Have wonderful holidays! Yours, ~Nina

shazbat

16 years 5 months ago

You are absolutely right, it

You are absolutely right, it is tout de suite but that didn't quite fit. funnily enough "Mort" is one of the few discworlds that I have read, perhaps thats where this came from, I think it must have crept in when I wasnt looking. Thanks for the comments john