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Lilac Moons from a Master

As Infinitesimal leaves
plucked by a great seer
it started,

half-light birthed
and a lilac moon
erupted,
from a crown of pine

all this,
concealing
a master at work
 
I observed,
invisible hands
slowly smear
the canvas,
Water Lilies splash
in my pastel sky,
astonished

existing for eons,
since waters lapped
at Uluru,
since hanging rock
was submerged
never knowing a glory
of impression,
wedges of oceans
separated

and now,
lifetimes later,
Monet
paints the sky
in my awe

as bat wings spread
moving night,
through life's grandeur

— Seren, Nov 22, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Lady Jayne, your poetry is

Lady Jayne, your poetry is touching high art. Congratulations! Love, Mom p.s. Water lilies splash (only one L for plural and lilies' if you want plural possesive. "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Mom

your praise and encouragment means so much and I know you know that,thank you ... much love Jayne x x
C

CyberSpace

16 years 6 months ago

love the wording my love

love the wording my love it's very good well put together love ya heaps hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

ello Darlin

And thanks for listening to me read it lol a couple of times hahaha and for the advice darlin ... love and hugs Wifey x x x
B

bjp

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

Here is a private gallery of wonderful images. Is this, Australia's Jayne-Chloe, or the famous New York performance poet. You continue to astonish me with your willness to metamorph into ever more colourful butterflies. Congradulations, sweet Jayne-Chloe, Higglyest Bugs, Brian
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Brian

I thank you for your comment ... this poem came from nowhere ... I was watching a sunset and seriously? looked like Monets' waterlilies picture ... hes one of my favourite painters ... and this took life and made me write it ... performing is in my blood ... lol and I miss it,one day I maybe get back to it ...and your comment has given me another idea ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
G

Gerry

16 years 6 months ago

Poetic Images

Poetic images abound in this picturesque poem and I love the way "a lilac moon erupted, from a crown of pine." This is an image I'll long remember! Gerry Beyond agree and disagree there is a field. I will meet you there. Rumi
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Gerry

I am sooo glad you like this one its one that came from nowhere and just formed ... thanks for the comment it is much appreciated love and hugs Jayne x x
L

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Hey there

Magical and enthralling, very beautiful. Yes, you are excelling by the minute, Dear Empress. I felt a nice shiver as I was reading this. Excellent, vivid and I enjoyed. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lyz

Thanks sooo much for reading this one ... I know my new stuff isnt as popular but I am enjoying the journey and its been peaceful lol I got no kids tonight I am making the most of it, writing in silenceeeeeeeeeee !!~ hahaha love you biggest hugs Jayne x x
L

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

What do you mean

isn't popular? I am loving it, yes I know I was not going to use love it but how else do you say it, growing in prose, be proud. I think you have been writing brilliantly of late. You go girl and stop the worrying. Love it, haha. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Lyz

Quietly proud cause the cocky chook always gets chopped first lol ...hahaha and I have had enough hits this yr lol glad you like these I am trying to stretch but its not easy ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
L

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Cocky?

Nah, you stretch all you want darlin. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

I shall stretch just for you

I shall stretch just for you today ;) youll see what I mean either tonight or tomorrow ;) I am nearly finished one I have been working on a month lol love and hugs J x x x
Z

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi jayne

hi jayne another strong write your extending the comfort zone again this is so well done here ,,,,,zigy
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Your right the last few writes I am pushing the envelope ... and I am so glad you liked this one big smile ... love and hugs Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Magz

Thanks so much darlin I am happy you liked this one ... I have so many artist friends lol and I cannot paint to save my life ... but I so admire anyone with the gift ... love and big hugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Okay

Stretched enough, and I am still waiting. Love ya, Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Pmsl I couldnt post till the

Pmsl I couldnt post till the 24 hrs was up lol shits me off when i am tired but tonight I am like a big cat stretching in the cool of the night and lovinggg it lol ... love and hugs Jayne x x
O

orgami

16 years 6 months ago

bats

one of the lovliest poems of late I have read of you wonderful calming and deeply atmospheric descript and feel bravo!
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest O

This one is real ... I saw all this and put it into poetry it was a spectacular night ... and I deeply appreciate your visits to my page your a light I have always followed love and hugs Jayne and take care of you dear man