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Killin' and Chillin'

Meet me at the coffee-house, I think you know the one

Where I saw you seeing me, and I said you look like fun

I'd like to know you better, maybe we could date

Let's paint the town bloody-red, do it up first-rate

I know of a little place, we could grab a bite to eat

And listen to some rockin' stuff... chewing to the beat

I think we should have some fun, maybe a drink or two

We can explore feeling good, feeling me... feeling you

Dessert might be at your place, or maybe even mine

It doesn't matter much, by then we'll be feeling fine

I have a little tidbit I've saved just for tonight

His blood still fresh in the package, the flesh firm and tight

Now we need some music, a little candle-glow

We will dance a little closer, really nice and slow

The sweetness of his lips, pulled off and chewed up nice

His blood drained fresh, from the vein...I like it warm...no ice

Have some strips of bloody meat, raw like a Sushi dish

Or I'll pluck his eyes for you, if that's what you wish

The wok is filled with garlic and some fresh cut leeks

Now I'll add the chunks of fat, and the sliced butt-cheeks

Erotic pleasure and the like, is where you find it Dear

I didn't think that I was close, that it would be so near

I'll respect you in the morning, I promise... be sure of it

I'll prize the night, each hour, and every single minute

 

— Geezer, Nov 21, 2009

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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hardcorechick28

16 years 6 months ago

i love it.....

this could be the start of an interesting relationship!!!! More to come I am sure.....i will have to write something from DeMona's perspective...what do u think
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Yes please do...

I'd like to know what she thought of their first date. Killer is a little rusty, and not quite sure of how to behave. Does she like him?
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hardcorechick28

16 years 6 months ago

DeMona is

working on her opinion of her first date with Killer....I think she might want to see him again...if she can find him...or he finds her......hoping to have something up for you to read tonight
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Gee this made me think of

Gee this made me think of Hannibal Lector you have a touch of a master killer in this one ... Brava !! love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x Still tired darlin sorry for short comments (huggles)
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Killer has...

A great fondness for Hannbal, and would like to spend a little time trading recipes with him, and talking about how to prepare something special for the holidays. Maybe "pickled pectorals" or "shredded lips." Thanks for the read Hun, and you just get as much rest as you need. I have been a little off myself lately, with trying to change my sleep patterns and all. Higger bugs, and lotta love, Gee
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Baz

16 years 6 months ago

Mmmm

You took me by surprise on the 12th line, I was reading a love poem up till then. As Jayne said, it smacks of Hannibal, and is very topical with the twilight movies which are doing the circuit. Did not like the last line! In my humble opinion it does not fit the rest of the poem. It appears to have been used to try and further shock the readers of your work. To me it comes across as a little boy who has just realised that the word shit is considered rude and uses it to shock. But who am I to be so critical? Sorry if I offend. Baz
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

No offense taken...

Killer is in many ways a little boy. He doesn't know how to act in some situations, like on a date. He knows that people and society in general, think that cannibalism is wrong, but not why. He knows that he wants DeMona to like him. He is not sure if she will, so he is giving himself an out if it turns out she doesn't. She will take the blame, and be the fucked up shit. I thought about how it sounded childish, and decided that it fit Killer's personna. Thanks for the read, and the comments. ~ Geezer